In our lifestyle today we have to think twice of where our children play/
Slugs followed from nines ,knives take lives, Now its like we're in a warzone with nowhere to hide/
Stop the violence, Youths on the streets too scared to discuss put in silence/
Stop the Drugs, Deprived children need their parents attention before it turns them against the word..../
Love..everything and anything even if means blood sarifices for your family..so that they stay../
Above all criticism and hate it's like the word's of another decide our.../
Fate in this chamber we call a earth but all we do to communicate is cause..../
Hurt..the people you love and you'll miss them all when their with the lord.../
Above.. and all stay true to your lady, dont mess around with chicks and show them your.../
Shady cause a woman is a privledge not a right keep the peace and it keeps the pussy.../
Tight like the way this flow is soundin....kinda like how this story's../
Impounded running through your brain like Dr Seuss hauntin your cerebrum antagonizin ya makin ya .../
Insane...its sad some youths try and end it with one slice of a .../
Vein..but if you stop it before it starts and give a child your heart it will stop the .../
Pain caused by suffering from growth and if you love your children swear to take this.../
Oath that you will never leave their side, even if they murder, tell the judge its the law they../
Abide...by the system, If there's anyone here that doesnt feel this flow please.../
List them....cause they'll be sent to detention, it shouldnt take a rhyme to grab the world's../
Attention...that world is really sick, and we were the virus that was the start of ..../
It and its never gonna commence, Because in our ill fated eyes the world is just a bunch of.../
Nonsense...irrelevant in fact who cares is unity is togetherness ../
Intact..Come together cause if we love than it can take away the clouds from any.../
Whether or not we approve, Its still our right to choose, the time we spare to.../
Lose cause that's all weve accomplished to do, For thousands of years until the thousandth year ..../
Two lives can start the peace but if the way we keep on goin our world will be..../

Deceased ..../

Rest in Peace Earth

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BMACK HIT ME UP NOW I GOT A VERSE LIKE THIS YOU GOT TO JUMP ON YOU CAPTURED THE TOPIC ESSENCE PERFECTLY

Rhyming/Flow
The Flow Was Good, NOt The Best I've Seen You Do..I KNow Your Capable Of Better, But Even So It Was Pretty Good...7/10

Vocab/Wordplay
You used A Good Array Of Words To Express The True Meaning Behind This Rather Morbid (lol) Topic. Good Wordplay In A lot Of places, So This Isn’t Something You need To Work On As You’ve Already Captured It...8/10

Concept/Topic
Nice Topic, You Played It out Well, Covered Alot of Aspects Of it: "Love, Hurt, Abide" etc... Nice...8/10

Overall
8/10, I Liked The Way You Had It Structured, The "Important" word If You Will, At The Beginning Of Each Bar, Was Really Hittin', Help Me Take Notice Of it.

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