point blank pages spitted with percision like a direct hit on tha pitiful bitches..
I consider my sadistic images a little jittery when I'm listnin'...
not shakey, shivering in ya spinal column so hard ya slip a disc an it falls out...
like an ecstacy addict when he falls down, fuck a call out!..
I'm all about bomin' a sound on all ya clowns ta leave ya faces painted red...
traces of death infested in places I've frequent-ed...
names range from steven to fred, hold up!! gim'me a sec...
reasons I lead this game still goin' over my head...
I don't know how this shit happened, it just did.....
I just dust kids like a terrorist with no concience...
I promise... I'm-a never tell a word of truth in any my topics...
'cause all I say in my rhymes is a whole lot-a tall lies...
the only thing real in my verse is when I say I'm on lines...


PEACE

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Not bad for a keystyle, needed lengthening to make it a full-on piece, but the flow was there, mainly because of your internals, you attempted a couple similies and bits of wordplay in there, the multi's helped it too, kept the flow downpacked and such, nothing really to flaw because it was only a keystyle, but i suggest when you drop a full-open mic piece you work on your imagery and emotion and write to a set topic such as love / hate, that will test you a little more.

Not bad though, you have the basics down, just work on it i guess.
Reply to my piece: !

basics... lol.... ok

thanx 4 the comment... as 4 topic.. I don't like set topics, I like just yammering on in shit, make u think I'm sick in my head.. lol... but it's all good.. 1

uppin!!

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I thought it was dope

I like the sick shit much better than that back packin crap

lol... tha's what I'm say'n man... fuck love/hate topics.. I ain't ja-rule... I'm a white boy with too much time on my hands...

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