Alone like I abstain from being absorbed into the audience/4
Better my bars better believe that I am awed and blessed/5

Control freak cause flows weak what was I created to contain/4
Despite the fight I displayed, democratically all I get is disdain/4

This essay encompasses everything about elevating/4
Fling fire on funny flows like I’m forever fumigating/6

Generally a good guy, grounded but im about to gate/4
Hold me back happenstance says im about to hate/3

Instead, I stay insisting that I am not insane/5
Judging to jack some like Jackie or Jermaine/4

Knock and mock and kill you son knuckle-up/3
Lethal lyricist laying on the floor looking-up/4

Mic and melodies make a merry mate/5
Nas, Notorious, Naughty, Nelly, Nate/5

Only vets own the respect their owed/4
Please newbies: get percent then poll/3

Question: queers quote shit but you sum don’t quotient/4
Response: we all vent Rick said it so its just a re-invent/3

Simple flow’s stomped like sneaker soles/4
Take notes cause Twinz had twinkle toes/4

Underground stay unknown below like an underwater win/3
Vicky heard vicious verbs now Marshall is the Vatican/4


I know K and L were cheats but they were hard to do. This whole thing was hard to do. Q and R are about biting, and how people try to play it off that its ok. The mention of Rick is cause Slick Rick did a lot of 2 people conversations in his songs.
I couldn’t finish…

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lol man all i gotz to say is i enjoyed readin this plain n simple
id luv to see u go at a regular concept but for what u tried to do id say its not bad at all id give it a 7/10 i dont care what otha ppl say

ok prolly hard to do i ain't gonna try it

-good job-

it was alright. you had a good concept, but I felt it didn't flow together and times didn't make sense. I'm not sure what you were going for, whether they were to be read individually or as one. Nice start, but I'd work on it.

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that was crazy lol, i enjoy'd that topic was mad definatly s hoy drop even though u didjnt finish 8 /10 guy peace

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tight peace fell a lil short at times but hey im the same way so fuck it do you and sty dropping this type of ish

The alliterations in some parts was nice...The difficulty level didn't seem to high for the fact that you spaced so many words but none the less it's alot better than the previous work i've viewed from you...



i'm an assasin assaulting ambitions and asperations
born brawn, blazen bazooka bombs n blood bathin
chasin celestial collages, clonin cerebral cells
destin to desolve diaphragms and display the details
easily escaping earth, extreme elevation embrassed
fuckin faggots can forget a future filled with flames
gratifying gods ghosts, glowin' in gardens
hells heads hung high heroic but heartless
intinsify initial insight in illiterate i's(eyes)
judged by jury's asa juvi my journeys justified
a kleptnomaniac killing wit keen kinetics
left ligaments lacerated, ya lost ya leverage
Master of mass massacaers n murdering menators
a necromancer navigating narcotics n-the-north
an obscene omen birthing ominous offspring
preventing poor preformance with Perfection pausing-
ya'll queer as quadroople quanity's of drag queens-
rabid rotation of races rampaged in rap reads-
suplexin shadows severin several sides n sections
terminating testicles n teats wit tentacles every time i'm textin-
utopia-vs-universe ultimately undergoing war but unscathed
vacuming verses, vonerable yet visiously vague
warming up warheads, in water we wait n wade-
x-it x-ceptance, x-terminate foes, no x-cape

Sorry, i'm bored...At least you inspired me tho...

Stay up and keep elevating..1ne

i shouldnt hate....
i really shouldnt...
f it... i hate you... kidding
thanx for the feedback, and showing me how to do it right

uhhh this shit must have been hard to try and you only fail when you don't try the subject matter skipped around alot but the difficulty level for this particular type of structure supersedes it so 7.5/10 for AmAtCha and 9/10 for likewise ( he finished it). 1

this shits really easy ou reay ryheduipo

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this is my 3rd up, can i get some more feedback
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i saw phi life cypher do a song with this concept a long time ago. its still an original idea but that doesnt change he fact that the lines as a whole really didnt make much sense. you know multis, you got vocab, try and make sense.

^^^Prety much what I was gonna say. It seems like at times you got cought trying to stay with the scheam and some of the likes wasn;t as effective as others, kinda fell off at parts. PLus people say it's an original concept when it isn't...it's been done before plenty times over the last couple years...the kinda shit you see in the cipher board. But keep it up though

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why stop at alphabet, do numbers lol (not funny), sick drop from both of ya, but likewise stole ya thunder like zues.