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08-26-03, 08:52 AM
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OriginIll
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Behind Closed Doors
IP: D79C 2834
my mind is locked & i can't seem to find the key
but it's a waste of time, cause im just a waste of me i hate to be who you see, cause you see.. its fake basically im mistakenly taken for a composed individual who's cool on the out side, but knows insides' a different view i have no clue.. what i want to do or who i am got alot of issues.. but of course, you dont give a damn & the truth is.. neither do i sometimes i do want to cry, i dont... i hold it all inside when it comes to that time, pride helps me to stay cool & the tears of riddicule gather to form a Kiddie pool leaving my eyes swiming behind lids of a pittied Fool but its silly to... Kid myself into thinking im ok cause it feels like im KO'd every fucking day there's no ducking the next round.. im contracted to stay signed by way of heartache & pain.. but hey as long as everyone can't read my bluff & the hand i was dealt is safe.. poker face is just to tough even though i feel like folding & giving it up i can't i won't be provoked by disgust have to trust in my acting ability.. the crowd wants more "im Happy to be alive".. thats what the script calls for if the world is a stage.. i guess im performing on yours Thank You For Your Applause.. This Has Been Anothr Production Of "When Im Not Behind Closed Doors" |
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08-26-03, 09:01 AM
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IP: 19AF 50C1
graphic thpought well discriptive of relatable inner torment vocab lacked a lil but this was good twin holla at me sometime id like to see more from you
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08-26-03, 04:15 PM
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Retired.
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IP: 9460 8C88
Very good verse here...
Vocab wasnt a strong point but it flowed well and conveyed the topic well... Good shit evolve... Also... check your pm's man... |
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08-27-03, 09:33 AM
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IP: 96EB 9617
Both them sumed it up pretty accurately^^^
You approached the topic really well....that seemed one of your stropngest points along with your flow...that was tight... the lines were kept deep and meanigful which kept you on topic Dope piece... oNe |
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08-27-03, 12:32 PM
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Just call me your Savior
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IP: 5013 C96D
that's some nice shit man, u express urself well when it comes to words, good shit
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08-27-03, 12:37 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
i like dat piece dawg............rememba no ones perfect dawg..................keep ya head up..............b proud................holla.....1ne
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08-27-03, 03:53 PM
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OriginIll
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IP: D79C 2834
All Feedback Appreciated
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