don't question tha unnerving truth that's wept with dry eyes
the dispise
the demise
whatever comes, goes with no question
so why ask?
as is, is a way to stop tha lies and deciet
yes
i was beat
but only by myself
i was lost and confused within tha labrynth of my mind
no way out
i was put there to suffer
so i live
with no questio to who put me here
will he save me
i doubt
and at tha same time
hope
but i do not care no more
for it must be
as is...

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The uneven bars really gave this it's "fuck it"
attitude....which actually I liked...
I wasn't a 100% sure on exactly you were writing
but I did get that "defeated" vibe....something
is troubling you..and a lose of faith...
keep droppin

it more or less has to do wit no longer tryin to change a life that i was stuck wit cause it's got me no where so now i just try to live my life period...

uppin...

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this was alright
could be better i spose
but it was tice (tight and nice, a word i created haha)
anyway keep droppin
peace

nice word, ha ha, slick, uppin...

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um...<cricket noise>...{whispered}uppin...

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i agree to the fullest it felt like u were a rattling empty soul but u knew wut u got urself into so maybe a touch of regret....? 1luv.

i got a different meaning out of the structure it was more of a monosyllabic way of speaking..............gave the entire piece a deadpan delivery which fit...............i do agree with part of the earlier responses that said this had a defeatist feel to it but i think overall the theme leaned toward more of "this is who i am, it ain't perfect so if you don't like me fuck you" feeling...(get all that? LOL) ...............everything i read by you has me more and more impressed great drop..............1