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Yup..here's a story
...enjoy Works finally payed of and science equations have given results So delighted he glows and it sustains just reminscing to cope Felt like she awoke from a deep sleep from suffering and pain Now retain hot glucose keepin life sweet with all the flames Problems tamed but happily opposing all the wild fun reaped No more salted tears weap into wounds, now smiles in heat Treat viewers by pullin tricks...or was that like trick or treat The treat has been had but really a trick...not seeming so deep Not taken that leap but the earth beneath you crumbles away With nothing to say but hold a curse,why was my views betrayed? Life can be conveyed now words priceless not having any worth Been watching David Blane the whole time...no dope dispersed Kept re-versing hopin to progress but ended up going backwards He had become a cow boy but what he wanted was to rapheards But nows gettin served... Like rabbit infront of the head-light... Didn't swerve But as a cat of hip hop you get 9 lives to expand upon pride Did he have enough time before he made mistakes and realised At least you tried!!...that isn't an honour thats corruption Reality was he faced seduction into abruption of desrutcion A stubbord son not to see what he had done...being false Now left wihtout a pukse shocked like he had seen a ghost He looked in the mirror |
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poetic deep and tight nuffg said
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like word~perfect said, it was poetic and i felt more like i was readin a poem and woulda been betta as a poem in my view, as a rap it was aight, but u gotta work on tha flow so it doesn't read like a poem...
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That's Right...I'm White
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deep shit yo
nice vocab good flow nice peice peace! |
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