this i sjust a song i am workin on try to figure out if i should put in on my cd or no ?

Title is stricaly hip hop

chorus: fool 4 me its flip-flopped/
im white and strictly hip-hop/
frum tha bottum 2 tha tip-top/
that means i cant let this shit stop/
i said fool 4 me its flip-flopped/
im white and strictly hip-hop/
frum tha bottum 2 tha tip-top/
y tha fuck should i let this shit stop/

verse 1: i feel like rappin so i thnk i will/
when yall look at me ya say i aint got skill/
well, hell get the fuck up out mah grill/
just sit back and chill/
and listen 2 how im the fuckin grand man/
but til then u seem 2 fuckin understand/
that im the muhfuckin man/
and none a yall aint shit next 2 me/
here have sum fuckin ecstacy/
if it'll help u discover/
im the ultimate light skin brotha/
fuck it its skillz not color/
i dont give a fuck about a source cover/
or if i ever roll on 22's/
i just wanna be on the news/
but not tha way ya b thinkin/
now u stare at me wit out blinkin/
but dont say a word, just shut the fuck up and let me do my thing/
lyrically, im the fuckin king/
check out da skill i bring/
its only da spring/
and i got ya kids 2 sing/
my fucked up rhymes/
but chill my music will make them throw away there 9's/
so dont question my ability/
i just get this will in me/
and manage my stability/
yall bitches b killin me/
u b 2 quick 2 judge/
and 2 hold a grudge, sayin my lyrics is dirtier than sludge/
but hey, it aint my fault ya packing fudge/

verse 2: a natural born lyricist and my first appearence is/
mo thrillin than any rolla coasta/
ima be on ya daughters wall on a poasta/
shit im hotter than tha inside of a toasta/
and pretty much any other household appliance/
my murders cant be solved by forensic science/
shit my defiance beats any confederate alliance/
check me out in ya next set of clients/
i bet ill be tha only fuckin whitey/
i dont give a fuck if u dont like me/
cuz whetha u like it or not im almighty/
howz dat 4 a bizerk twist/
ha ha compared 2 me u worthless/
u belong in circus, u aint shit but a clown/
and betta off underground/
now how dis sound? ima live larger than elephants/
i cant control my male violence/
u aint intelligent/
every rhyme u spit is an irrelevant/
sounds like yo rhymez wuz wrote by a chimp/
as for me, my shits fuckin pimp/
might as well wear a purple tux made with silk/
it dont even matta that my skins as white as milk/
i dont wanna sound like im braggin/
but u kno u fear me more than a knights fear dragon/
sick and tired of peeps naggin/
alls about how i got my pants saggin/
down 2 my muthafuckin ankles/
i got shit cumin at all different angles/

chorus: fool 4 me its flip-flopped/
im white and strictly hip-hop/
frum tha bottum 2 tha tip-top/
that means i cant let this shit stop/
i said fool 4 me its flip-flopped/
im white and strictly hip-hop/
frum tha bottum 2 tha tip-top/
y tha fuck should i let this shit stop/







verse 3: now that i got ya attention/
ill beam u 2 my dimesion/
where everything is warped/
ill take ur shot up corspe/
and throw it on ya baby mamas porch/
but thats just a minor technicality/
fuck it, head back 2 reality/
this is a lyrical fatality/
i slaughter every adjective and verb/
i kno u gettin scurred/
i am tha illest mc u ever heard/
u dont think so? thats just absurd/
u must be deeply disturbed or really dumd/
cause if silence is golden, then me rappin is platinium/
i got skilz, more than u can shake a fuckin stick at/
say my name bitch, that aint it, gimme my dick back/
all u gots 2 do is relax and sit back/
kick back, here have a tic-tac/
fuck da chit-chat, if u say my shits wack/
ima blast u in ya six pack/
shit i tend 2 do that/

x2 chorus: fool 4 me its flip-flopped/
im white and strictly hip-hop/
frum tha bottum 2 tha tip-top/
that means i cant let this shit stop/
i said fool 4 me its flip-flopped/
im white and strictly hip-hop/
frum tha bottum 2 tha tip-top/
y tha fuck should i let this shit stop/

ya lines are too short and you dont have any multis,hip hop is all about multis and word play and structure.keep elevatin kid.~1~

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ u said hip hop is about that
bitch i am a rapper and i write and rap how i want to just cause u dont like it dont mean that the rest of the world isn't goin to trust me i do shows around charlotte and i have 2 cd's out

i am uppin for some feed back ya'll~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ im out
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yo that cat is crazt this isa hot as song i heard it recorded and it is fuckin hott nice sond man freal keep up the work

...yep
pz...

IT WASNT THAT REEl NICe,but ITs iight, It AINT WACk..Keep workin on it

Yeah, this shit is pretty sick. I like it, but I bet it sounds way better with a beat. Keep it up.

If you get the time to, check out my shit in Open Mic: She's gone now.

Good shit, laaate.