MY LIFE

Lifes game got dis mind disracted/
With my world in your hands LORD why does my heart fill FRACTURED/
I thought 24yrs of my life was enough time to PRACTICE/
Welcome to my world 24hrs a day TRIPPING LIKE ACID/
Looking around seeing CLOWNS shitting on me HOLDING ME DOWN/
Trying to invert dis FROWN/with a oppourtunity to hold da CROWN/
Battling this life/dis karma swings harder then 3 STRIKES/
Feeling like a straight locked in a room full of DIKES/
Contemplating death as i see others stand tall/
A question of COURAGE brings me to da edge to take da FALL/
Looking back i see wasted ADOLESCENT/
KARMA seeing my FUTURE 'n' EVERYDAY PRESENT/
these doctors feeding me with all these MEDS/like maniacs should be reported to FEDS/
got my mind imbalanced/feeling like TOSSED SALAD/got me mixed up like COKE "N" CANNABIS/
These endless thoughts got me crazed/
Reaching for understandment but my peeps think its STAGED/
A son of a FATHER passed/A BROTHER LOST/im paying this lifes COST/
pulled between these two worlds feeling like RUBBISH IS TO PAVEMENT TOSSED/
you told me to keep my head up/step up/at all costs dont STOP/

FORGIVENESS AND THANKYOUS


Harry you gave me a friendship/for this I GIVE YOU ALL I GOT/
You are so INFLUENTIAL filling me with POTENTIAL in lifes game/
taught me a reason to forgot 'n' drop the RAZOR TIPS FROM MY VIENS/
Yo Meak ya feeling me/without your laughter i would feel PAIN/
You got me straighting this neck strain/sun rays and no rain/
Occy you got me a reason to live/but da pain i caused you i dont know how you FORGIVE/
but my jealousy got my life on a PUPPET STRING/
seeing things you dont see/i know ya feeling me/wit these flings it hurts and it STINGS like a Bumble B/
im infatuated with obbession knowing now why my karma taught me a LESSON/
for i hurt and i hurt a ANGEL by messin now MY LIFE KNOWS WHY IT AINT BEEN BLEESIN/
DA PAST GOT ME IN GUILT, PUPPILS DILATED ENOUGH REASON FOR SELF INFLICTED PAIN SLAMMING MY HEAD TO DA PAVEMENT/
NEVER WANTED TO LEAVE/BUT MY MIND LEFT ME SO I FLEEDED/SO I TAKE DA GUILT FOR DA REASON I MADE UR HEART BLEED/
IT WAS FOR DA RELATIONSHIP I FELT IT WAS A ILLEGAL STATEMENT/
YOU HELD DA KEY WHY I WAS CUFFED N LOCKED IN DA BASEMENT/
HAD THESE RUMOURS SPREADING LIKE IT WAS HEREDITARY/
SO i HELD THESE CLIPS TO MY FACE MOMENTARILLY/
FOR LIFES GAME REVOVLES IN A CIRCLE/SO HOLD YA HEAD UP HIGH LIFE WILL BECOME FERTILE/

SWITCH TO DA END

SIMPLISTIC-STATISTICS-GOT ME INLINE FOR ANOTHER SUICIDAL VIC-TIM-SO WHAT DO YA THINK THEN-PULL DA TRIGGER TAKE DA FALL-OR STAND TALL-TO J O H M FOR MAKING MY COURAGE SEE DA LORD.

I LIKED IT SHOWED TRUE INNER STRUGGLE I CAN RELKATE TO DO YOUR THANG I THINK THIS WAS A GREAT PEACE AND WOULD LOVE TO HERE AN AUDIO

this was scrait ma nig... felt what you was gettin at mos def...ya flow was pretty nice...but somma ya ish almost seemd repetitive..in what you was sayin....just work on ya vocab n wordplay..this woulda been iller..


igido

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RN Vs RB WAR!!....yr 2000...vet~~YEA I SAID VET!! WHAT YOU WANT ME TO PROVE IT? STEP THEN YOU FUCKING HOMO'S

thanx so much for da feedback from yall. I respect it totally, will pick myself up on this. Gonna do this in audio wiht a friend spittin aswell..

Anymore feedback would be so grateful.

that was an ill drop man, i was feelin yah lines an yah opunches great structure...feelin yah man...we all go through a struggle juz some harder then others but pais pain n'a mean? peace homz

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

much respect to you rule, feeling ya. Thanx heaps for da feedback. I really respect it.....Peace homz

i get it i get it i get it! even tho im not supposed to cuz its ur life...i see wut u went thru.....i know how u feel wen u wana get stuff out an u put it on papaer,,,,or keyboard....but yo

"You are so INFLUENTIAL filling me with POTENTIAL in lifes game/
taught me a reason to forgot 'n' drop the RAZOR TIPS FROM MY VIENS/"

thats my favorite bar rite there.....i see understand the feelin....i get wut ur sayin....stay up an keep them commin

8 1/2 out of 10.....and im a tough grader.........but i need to say great concept

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Soft Focus
Suicide Inc.
RhymeVantage
Def.Ill
Ghost-Writers

Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..

nice flow nigga i can relate to that shit nice piece my nigga

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thanks so much for all of this homz. Im really greatful for da feedback. Means alot when you put something down that comes from ya heart and ya get some sweet ass feedback....Makes me glow...

Stand tall, like you did in this piece, i was feelin you, had some good meta's, and the picture of pain you were painting was strong, full of emotion which usually results in a strong verse. Nice work man.