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Nuerocalibur -> Split Deadly
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Verse: 1
a heart keeper/ I conceive her/ in dreams so meager/ I press in the subconscious deeper/ to find my dream reaper/ My open-ended story/my destiny metaphorically/ Given splendid restoring/ but beauty tends to ignore me/ How can I manage/ I'm average/ beauty's her advantage/ falling canvass/ viewpoint slanted/ my heart is too callused/ What is love? How can I render a clear perception/? What is the heart? A symbol of affection or rejection/ Lord is Love an excuse to view life in Technicolor/? You took my heart smothered You left me in utter comfort/ Love is sacrifice/ love is giving life and embracing me/ Love created me/ so I can show love creatively/ Love put strength in my breath/ length in my step/ put faith in my heart/ and grace in my depths/ so I confess Love had me fulfilled and burns in me with certainty/ Love is passion, and the bridge to human maturity/ Verse:2 Loves been planted/ in my heart but never been abandoned/ I water this tandem of love and utter compassion/ Is it everlasting when the seed is expanding/ I imagine love as the soul's fashion/ and most beautiful companion/ As our heart is love's environment/ alteration inspired it/ I desire this/ Love is human's only requirement/ The heart-aches/ when the scars-take/ time to heal/ Loving mistakes/ causes heart-to-breaks/ and hindsight's all too real/ But the butterflies are vibrant/ in the stomach they scream in silence/ Each heart beats a triumph/ and a reflection of his likeness/ love isn't a science/ its feelings being acknowledged/ its the selfish being abolished/ its the heart being astonished/ But love's viewpoint gets jaded/ ultimate Love is created/ With a depth that dives into the heart and makes it sacred/ So lord take my heart/ tear it apart /and rebuild it/ refill it/ So when I spill it/ I'll give others the greatest gift of fulfillment/ chorus Verse: 3 Humans are flawed/ Love has a cost/ love is the cross/ His blood drops/ transformed to seeds to grow love's crop/ As we fitted a crown of thorns he wore for our alibi's/ We whipped him with our lies/ nailed him with our compromise/ Humanity self destructs/ as tendon snapped and veins bust/ He was raised up/ to replace us/ arms open to embrace us/ Love is bloodshed and 9' nails driven / love is lashes given/ it kept him on the cross/ and has us forgiven/ love is the walk up Golgotha/ his blood bled with water/ A lamb at the altar/ quenched the thirst of all who wandered/ Love conquered/ in the heart of the paupers/ and benefactors/ The political monsters/ and mockers who display the senseless laughter/ Reformed religious matters/ and nailed my sin to a tree/ Love became ambitious patterns/ its fruit had set me free/ Love became vivid/ as they whipped him with Judas kisses/ He said, " I love you" when he finally spoke "it is finished"/ About this song: This is by far my favorite song but probably the most grueling process I've experienced while writing a song. Mostly because I wanted to do the concept justice. When the idea hit me, I felt the need to explain love in three different ways. Those ways being: 1) the love between a man and woman, 2) the concept and theory of love, and 3) the ultimate act of love. The first verse began as part of a song I was writing with my friend Mateo. I completed the first verse in one night and kept it on my computer. Shortly after, my computer crashed and I lost most of what Mateo had written as well as other writings from the past three years. I was left with only my first verse. I decided to do the song alone so that I could expand more on my idea of the concept. I ended up spending a good portion of free time over the next two months writing it. |
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When the song was near completion, I sent it to a few trusted friends for their
opinions. I wound up working on it online all night with a friend from Texas tearing it apart to rebuild it (thanks Omega). He helped me restructure and clarify what I was saying to the audience so that they could more clearly grasp what I was leading up to as the song progressed. Last edited by Split Deadly : 09-30-03 at 10:19 PM. |
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^^^^
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Stop sleeping.
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This was a pretty good piece i thought, it made a good read, your flow through out the piece was pretty good, your content was good as well, your vocab was pretty well too, overall good piece, keep dropping, and if you get the chance check out one of my pieces with Gene Pool, Thanks.
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