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09-30-03, 11:42 PM | #1 | |||||||
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So many times *(what you know about)....peep and reply
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Yo this shit right here is just some frustration i gotta get off my chest.....(2nd verse is something new i was playin wit, peep it)
So many bad times I survived// so many times I had to let my real emotions hide// cuz when your born a man your taught not to cry// everyday i wake up not caring wether i live or die// Sometimes i wonder if i was ment to be here or if it all was just a big mistake// To deal with the pain I use alcohol and smoke weed, im so baked// Suicide used to consistantly run through my mind// It was like i was living life in the dark even though im not blind// As you grow you get used to people treating you like shit, nobodys ever kind// Even in the rap game after you blow up someones always tryin to take away your shine// Life is a rat race// My advice is go at your own pace// Dont ever let anyone ever fool you and make your name a discrace// Remember where your from and thank the people who helped you get their// Fill your heart with love, dont be like me and let it get cold and bare........ : Pause : Fuk a chorus, this is for the fake thug in the street What do you know about bein a man// what do you know about have'n cuffs constrict both hands// what do you know about survive'n in the streets, you had to fight// what do you know about cryin wile lookin up at the starz prayin for something to finally go right// what do you know about spendin 2 years of your life in a jail cell// what do you know about have'n so many bad memories you cant remember any good ones to tell// what do you realy know about seein 3 of your close friends shot dead right infront of you// what do you know about the closest family you have is your crew// what do you know about being 18 and seein more shit in your life than you should// what do you know about when your around your moms and girl you always pretend to act good// what do you know about bein a real thug// what do you know about usin actin tuff as an escape when all you ever really wanted was a hug......WAS A FUCKIN HUG!!!
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*R.I.P* Jimmy L. , Louis L. , Aj R. , Tyler R. , Chris R., Dan W. , Matt F....... " You all will never be forgotten and your spirits live within us all!!! R.I.P*" " So for the 2nd time [The Pharisses] summoned the man who had been blind and said "Speak the truth before God. We know this man is a sinner." "Wether he is a sinner I do not know." :The man replied: "All I know is this...Once I was blind and now I can see" John 1x 24-26 |
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09-30-03, 11:57 PM | #2 | |||||||
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damn G!
i mean it man.... damn G! I said it twic just to be nice damn G! I think i'll even say it thrice... This man is obviously the real thing he paid the price.... Dude sume of the 2nd verse needs a tweak... What I find is sometimes i get ahead of myself and throw too many words into my lines as i go further into my flow.... now if that happens either you need to speed up or drop som of those excess words....feel me? example: "when your around your moms and girl you always pretend to act good" you could change this to: "when around your moms and girl jus pretendin to act good" you is mad though so i assume you jusst flow faster n' tighter keep it so fresh and so clean G {Peace}.....
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09-30-03, 11:59 PM | #3 | |||||||
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^^^^ HAAHAHA aiight thanx for the feedback. This isnt my usualy style but i was tryin somethin new out, but thanx for the feed back..uppin this
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*R.I.P* Jimmy L. , Louis L. , Aj R. , Tyler R. , Chris R., Dan W. , Matt F....... " You all will never be forgotten and your spirits live within us all!!! R.I.P*" " So for the 2nd time [The Pharisses] summoned the man who had been blind and said "Speak the truth before God. We know this man is a sinner." "Wether he is a sinner I do not know." :The man replied: "All I know is this...Once I was blind and now I can see" John 1x 24-26 |
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10-01-03, 02:53 PM | #4 | |||||||
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thought it was an average attempt
thought the second verse was different, but the flow wasn't there! aight |
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