I am the happiest person in the world right now. I was given a second chance in life to succeed where I once have failed. I have returned to my true love. What she was so afraid to tell me were her true feelings and last night, they came out. That void in my heart has finally been filled. My Devilish Princess, I promise with my heart and soul that I shall be true to you. I almost lost you once before, I won’t let it happen again. These feelings so deep that I was hiding finally were revealed when I heard her say how much she loved and missed me. I made her happy before and I will once again. It feels like we were made for each other. I am “amazing” because of whom I am and the things I do. I do truly love you. Not till I was away from you did I realize how much I missed you and how much I love you. Truthfully, neither words nor actions could ever explain how much I love her. To hold you in my arms once again and feel your soft soothing touch, to kiss your sweet silk lips once again….. The feeling is so amazing that my body and heart explode with happiness. With this I devote my undying love for you. To make you happy is all I want and everything else is a privilege that I gain. This all falls back to “A Woman”. I say you are mine but I correct myself because you are not property, you are a person, with a heart, soul, mind and emotions. I love you and from this day on prepare to de dazzled my Devilish Princess……..

Devilish Princess

^ ive been called that myself

this was more of a I GOT HER BACK AND IM TELLING THE WHOLE FREAKIN WORLD ABOUT IT

which is good

lol

it was a paragraph of expression and i can not really critque the poetic value
but simple offer you my happiness in the fact that you got her back

1st of all the reason y u aint
had many replys is becauser how
its set out
it put me off alot almost 2 the point where i didnt want 2read it
and whilst reading it i kept losing where i was


i dont like pieces that dont rhyme because i lose intrest in the piece very fast but this kept me reading its a nice pierce 4 ur bird 2 read

keep posting

Yeah you should put the lines under each other so its structured good, but it was a good read, got threw off at times but it was good, your content was good i thought, overall it was a good piece.

I agree with Hazy, this wasn't really a poem but more of a
declaration. Why don't you write that in a letter to the
"Devilish Princess" from your post and give it to her. Tell her
how you feel its not going to make a difference to our lives
if you tell us but it might make her happy to know you will do what
you can to make her happy... etc. keep writing though.

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At times, when something so wonderful happens, something we have wanted so bad, it can be hard to actually believe it... and writing it is like rejoicing in it. I see you rejoicing here.. Its like you have written this down because you were bursting with emotion and I love that.
I wouldnt say its not poetic writing, granted its not a conventional style of poetry, but it has the emotion of true verse, the beauty, a poetic love letter addressed to the universe if you will.. Emotion isnt always meant to rhyme, isnt meant to be structured, sometimes that just complicates what it is you are feeling when you write.
Really nice to read, Thank you for sharing your happiness with us, its always heartwarming to see, and Good Luck with your girl

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for the other poeple above, I like going in my own seperate direction, being different and not followin the "lines" on how ppl are suppose to do things. If you read more of mine maybe you'll see where i'm gettin at peace, and thanks 4 ur replys appreciate it

didn't feel like quoting anything......you have talent that is for sure.....i now dub thee the ll cool j of rb......very smooth fitting i guess......free word isn't my strongest suit.....you pull it off with ease however........i like the devilish princess thing.....kind of a wierd nickname but to each his own i guess......romantic i see why you call yourself "smooth" nice piece...

respect...

Thanks prophiit, it's great respect to hear from you and everyone else. Doesn't matter if you have thousands of posts, just cuz you have a lot of em doesn't mean ur good. I just let things go as they are and speak from the heart. Much respect with my deepest regards JT

well well....

for those who dont like reading things like this...
try writing a little letter on a piece of paper for
someone who you have a tad of interest in...
because this here is a paragraph..on paper or here...

Smooth this was done well and its not really that different...
all lyrics are poetry and poetry dosent need to rhyme...
you might have a rhyme for her and this might be
you speakin at the end of a song or something....

anyhow this was fine...but could you take some time
out to reply to other people like prophitt who take
time out to give you feedback on your own pieces

and oh..dare to be different..stand out from whats redundant..

la paz

Thanks content. Thats what i do and will continue to do. If ppl don't like my stuff then just don't reply. Thank you all for replyin. I've been in and out and now i'm gettin round to replyin 2 ppl. thanks again, peace