another-date, probably gonna be another-rape,for brothers-sake you oughtta find another-mate//

he witnesses bleeding-and-bruising, which inturn is leading-to-using, and maybe abusing, his girl in tha future//

shitll definitley mute-ya, wishin for no more disputes-huh, put down tha gat dont shoot-mah//

convinced her not to blast, it was tha last thing i could ask, before i could even dash, she mashed, blew a slug in his mug all i heard was tha blood splash//

tha crash-as his body collapses, nauseous gases eventualy ashes, like when u get tha last-hit and it always cashes//

thirty minutes later tha pigs arrived, tha coroners behind, everybody askin who didnt survive, at right around five//

they found his corpse, on tha porch wit my sister scorched, see she been torchin meth right after it happens, she so messed up she beside tha body laughin//

tha truth is he was evil and deserved for her too clap-him, once she tried to slap-him, he got violent so i attacked-him//

police reports get lost in red-tape, tha shit i fed him he got fed-straight, fuck all tha legal shit he shouldve loved but instead-hate, thats why he a dead-date..

Nice piece. I can tell that it came from the heart. These things happen in real life and its sad to see it happen to good people. Keep writing, I find your writings worth the read and will continue to post to them.

MM

thirty minutes later tha pigs arrived, tha coroners behind, everybody askin who didnt survive, at right around five//
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that had such a sad vibe to it...like im scared to go out now thinkin im either get raped or what not

your structure is something that sticks with you i can see
the single bar double line theory is one you like

the theme was great kind asad tho
but nonetheless good peice

i appreciate tha replies yea this shits real life shhit now what im sayin, still upiin.~1~

I liked this piece. It just draws you into and I like the way you structure your pieces. I like that, its kool. Nice drop, and sad. its also sad how that shit happens in real life. I like reading your stuff so keep posting beau

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