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| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
10-09-03, 10:31 PM
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Little flow i feel
IP: 9405 9DA7
Chastized as i ride
Divide my enemys in Two Subside my Henesy Roll wit da crew Got so my gas locks u think ima jew See so many blue cars~ wit 5 - 0 in it should of went to clinic i could of got my anger counsolded my parents didnt love me friends didnt roll wit me they hated me till i started bangin they started hangin stagin an act as if we was down boys rocked fo some grass hollow tips in yo ass cuz yo color shoe laces racin as i chase this i aint scared of the basment just the cemetary |
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10-10-03, 01:19 AM
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IP: 1126 952D
alright... hmmmmmmm, where to start...
flow- OFF!... put more content into your open mics... read what you wrote... make sure that you can follow your flow, cause if you cant... NOBODY else will be able to... Structure- OFF!....... by doing as stated above, you should be able to construct a structure...(structure is where all of your lines are evened out... helps the flow) Wordplay- missin it... you'd prolly have to go to tutorials to understand what I mean when I say your missing it. Vocabulary- let people know your smart... use an extensive vocabulary to make people drop their jaws in awe... Multies- add some multie rhyming lines... by extending your vocab. you should be able to pull off some incredible multies... Topic- the topic was good... and you stayed on topic fairly well, just make sure that every open mic you drop... you STAY ON TOPIC... just some pointers to elevate your skills. A.T. |
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