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Old 10-13-03, 06:17 PM   #1
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why....

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why do my weak trembling legs still stretch out in a run?
Why do i sit in fearful dark places i hate to hide?
How can i look deep into your trusting brown eyes,
and still have hate inside me that repeatenly lies?

Why do i make those who love me mountains suffer?
Suffer in ways that at first they can't even tell.
Utter horrible curses upon their living being and souls.
Locking them with no escape in a tortoreus invisable hell!!

It doesnt set me to rest or cause my mind any good,
It doesnt provided my body with some kind of magical pleasure,
to know or belive that my hands strangled my loved one,
to hurt them deep inside beyond any mathmatical measure.

Please speak up if you know when this insanity will end!
Do you know when these evil forces will exit the stage?
When finally the red satin curtin will fall ending the act,
or will i continue to hurt my in knowing lovers in a scenic rage?

~Tera~
DONT HATE
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Old 10-13-03, 10:31 PM   #2
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Why do i make those who love me mountains suffer?
~was this a typo?~

Why do i make those who love me mountains suffer?
Suffer in ways that at first they can't even tell.
Utter horrible curses upon their living being and souls.
Locking them with no escape in a tortoreus invisable hell!!

I understand the lyrics somewhat and relate somewhat
for the recieving end of this...some girls misuse words...

It doesnt set me to rest or cause my mind any good,
It doesnt provided my body with some kind of magical pleasure,
to know or belive that my hands strangled my loved one,
to hurt the deep inside beyond any mathmatical measure.

~I will never completely understand the way women think
because you all have a little union or sommit...I do wish
that they thought more like you did..things might be easier~

Filed this was another good piece from you girl containing
decent imagery flow and wordplay..aspects of a good writer..

la paz
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Old 10-14-03, 03:44 PM   #3
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thx alot for the reply keep uppin
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Old 10-15-03, 03:50 PM   #4
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Nice piece gurl. Was worth the read. This writing was full of emotion and easy to read and understand. Look forward on reading more from you.

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Old 10-15-03, 05:33 PM   #5
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ill piece,mad emotion felt, good vocab, good structure, well laid out, very in depth, all in all nice piece ma, keep droppin.~1~
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