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10-14-03, 06:54 PM | #1 | ||||||
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anger of the world...keystyle
IP: B89D 4D65
yo, check it
with dictators on the loose.......... like osama, and saddam, people with powers, like george bush, is turnin into mad-man/ when we could all sit down, and end the drama in a week, instead of havin nuclear weapons, leavin futures certainty bleak/ but blind men still have visions, an mens speak without voice, and to these world leaders, we listen, like we have no choice/ what will it take, for the next world leader to loose his mind, but these people live by the motto u gotta cruel to be kind'/ but the world it like a time bomb waitin for the next epidemic, but we still live our lives, goin on striving to be academic/ blocking all the problems out, that the world is in struggle, no other planets out there to help us out, god want nothin to do with trouble/ plz hit this up with some criticisms, i kno the topic a lil played, but it was in my mind and plz, plz vote on this battle, its my second one an no 1 voted on the first http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=85357 |
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10-14-03, 08:05 PM | #2 | |||||||
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that was an ok drop homie......ur topic was ok.....and u know its kinda played so i wont comment to much on that......ur vocab and wordplay was ok....u need to elevate a little though.......overall not a bad post....could use some work.....but for the most part it was good......
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10-15-03, 09:47 AM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: B89D 4D65
aiight thanks for the feed back dude
uppin for more feed back plz give a fair vote on the battle y'all http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=85357 |
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10-15-03, 10:40 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 19AF 50C1
very poetic and simple but complex in concept needs some work but not bad
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10-15-03, 12:31 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 2BA8 E98F
but the world it like a time bomb waitin for the next epidemic,
but we still live our lives, goin on striving to be academic best line cos it had most complex rhyme play, but the structure and flow was solid, could be tweaked the vocab and content was aight, seems like you rely on the last word to be the biggest, and yeah the topics played...it was a good effort, but it just did nt spark if you get me |
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10-15-03, 12:32 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 61CF 5276
yeah simple but thats sometimes what gets it done but overall the topic was pretty good and so was the vocab and everything so think was an pretty good drop overall
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