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Old 10-21-03, 08:42 AM   #1
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Remember?

When love wsnt forced..
that power wsnt everthing
That trust, was real trust,..,
and friends were real friends..

That desseases werent rulin,
and lovers werent foolin.
That no really ment no,
and that, and kids wernt for show.

That money wsnt a destroyer,
that death wsnt a big embroier.
That birth was a real gift a miracle,
and faith wsnt.. manipulated..

That drugs, were underground,
and cryin of baby's was a happy sound.
When u didnt have to be on top, jus to fall,
if you remember those days dont forget, give me a call.


I was bored..Feed-bak plz...
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Old 10-21-03, 08:50 AM   #2
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This was a nice peice. . seemed a bit rushed but it was still nice. . Th e line(s) i liked the most were in the last stanza. . you did a good job on this. . KeeP It Up
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Old 10-21-03, 10:04 AM   #3
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Thnx, Jup kinda rushed..
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Old 10-21-03, 06:40 PM   #4
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This was good you know.

It had a mellow niceness to it. You kept it simple. The points were made in a blunt way. Yet that bluntness didn't effect the fairly smooth flow.

Overall it was a quite echoing piece. Nice to read. With a strong meaning.

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Old 10-21-03, 08:57 PM   #5
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Thnx..

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Bak at you..

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Old 10-22-03, 05:08 AM   #6
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nice peice, i like tha 1st and last stanza best. a relaxin feel to dis. keep it up
peace~roX~
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