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Old 10-24-03, 02:03 PM   #1
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Betrayed By Faith (SS Championship)

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Well...
I'd like to get some feedback...
And you dont get much in SS so posting here as well

The Atheist
The only man upstairs is the crackhead on the third floor...
This life is bad enough... Why would I even hope for more...
Whats in store for me? Answer.. death and thats it....
Why spend life in fear of something that dont exist...
Religion? Bullshit... how dare they lie to me...
Existence is explained not by a book but evolution theories...
So I live life to the fullest... forget sins and commendments...
Lust and greed bad? Well then fuck a savior god damnit...
Nobody planned it... Life is just a series of events to enjoy...
So forget your holy book... Implausable... A virgin had a boy?....
Death comes near me... Life lived in fear of finality...
Its almost as if my lack of faith betrayed the life in me..


The Religious Person
Sundays here... Time for worship and reflection...
Heathons all around... Wishing they could be free of sins...
Life begins... And ends... With one theme... God...
May not be the perfect sheep yet... but lord we work hard...
I pray for atheists... And hope they will realize before its too late...
That their fate... Is to spend eternity at the gate...
Commandments are laws of life... Followed at all cost...
For I've missed nothing and without God I'm lost...
Sex, , cursing and other sins bring nothing but sorrow...
Why live for today
when the better part of existence extends past tomorrow...
Dying days around the corner... faith helps but worries me...
I missed so many things in life... Have my beliefs betrayed me?...


The Enlightened
Is there a God? Maybe... But something beyond us must exist...
Thoughts persist.. But live my life so nothings missed...
Dogma had it right... we should all question what we're told...
Maybe then we wont live in fear when we get old...
The Bible's sold? How is that for hypocracy....
Church is a chore? There is no celebration of faith to me...
Sin but repent... Not living in fear... See life as a blessing...
Why live in fear of God? Or the opposite... both left stressing...
I'd rather take it as it comes.. No dreading my judgement day...
Knowing that a real Father would not turn thinkers away....
Sheep are herded and killed... Why would I buy into that...
No excess of faith here... Nor is it something that I lack...
So even in death I will live on... Through original though I'll be saved...
If I dont expect anything in particular... How can I be betrayed?
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Old 10-24-03, 02:15 PM   #2
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I loved this. I cant see anythin wrong with it. So yeah....it's perfect until I think of somethin wrong with it.
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Old 10-24-03, 02:19 PM   #3
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This was amazing. .You know how much I liked this. .This is going to be very hard to beat. .If you didn't no how much I liked it. .

Potent 4 This Piece
You are invited to the wedding chrit of me & this piece. .lol

Fo real. .This was sick. .Props
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Old 10-24-03, 02:23 PM   #4
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^^^
Then nominate it...

lmao

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Old 10-24-03, 02:26 PM   #5
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I do have a net life chrit. .lol. .I will later. .Don't let me forget
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Old 10-24-03, 02:35 PM   #6
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Chrit this was pretty dope.... each verse was simple but it got
your point across nicely... at some points the flow was off... but
it backed right up.... all in all a decent piece

Peace
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Old 10-24-03, 02:39 PM   #7
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Was decent...

Ok vocab,...and a nice immagery...
some nice aspects, ...but a simple scheme, ..but was a nice, ..
read..shud be hard to beat..
Nice one..

U have a Pic Sig ROFL...
Lol...Cocky-ass.....

Nice Drop Props..
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Old 10-24-03, 03:19 PM   #8
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Tight shit...nice concept..pretty much perfect peice..stayed on what is was supoosed to...flows nearly perfect all the way thru jus cudda been more complex..spite that tight shit
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Old 10-24-03, 04:15 PM   #9
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this was nice, it seems like something louis logic would write.

isnt an atheist someone that has no religon? , if it is then that crack head line is dope.

you stayed on topic perfectly, you had a pretty good flow in this one, it wasnt off like the last one i replyed to.

dope concept i would have never thought of it.

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Old 10-24-03, 06:16 PM   #10
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aight i like the approach...3 types of people spitting
this would have been my all time fav if the 3 had different styles
1st: like the approach on it.. but i dont like junkies too much
flow was good on all so i wont bother to say that each time
2nd: you went all the way here...all out mormon!
3rd: now this is the kind of guy i can get down with...

overall good piece...hope i dont see you in SS
"Im better than you"

if you would be so kind
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Old 10-24-03, 08:02 PM   #11
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Garbage... this made me sick... it sucked so bad




lmao jp... good drop... mine was better tho...
didnt you just do a diss to kids who make
all of their verses different colors? lmao well anyways
it was a good read... like the symbolism in it... keep droppin

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Old 10-24-03, 10:31 PM   #12
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this was nice.....really....

i like the 3 perspectives......
amazing how u can see honestly through each of there eyes and envisionments.....

I see it as a pretty difficult piece to deliver on.....cus people are so biased....

but u kept it true an open-minded....str8 up dope peice.....8.5/10
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Old 10-25-03, 11:50 AM   #13
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Thanks for the feedback
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Old 10-25-03, 01:33 PM   #14
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the rhymes were basic, but this is one of the most original posts ive seen. the idea of looking at religion thru basically the only three different groups (except satan worshipers). lol. thatd be interesting. but overall i give this a 9/10. goodluck in the SS.
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Old 10-25-03, 02:27 PM   #15
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Werd Chrit.. Nice Drop

I Seen The Same Type Of Concept
From Calda Merda And G.Hod In The
Topicals (the Color Scheme N' Differnt
Views N' Shit) But Its All Good, Cuz You
Made This Dope.. YOu really Came Along
Way From Your First Piece

Looks Like I Have To Upp My Game In
The Match Huh ? lol
Good Drop Dukes
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