Red=Crazy B
Blue=Talon

The name is Talon, definition of ill
i flow in violence n silence for recognition of skill
makin easy money, while i rob casinos
got skill hotter than a jar of jalapenos
I take my time battling while U get daughtered
cuz i flow sicker than polluted water
I got the fighting power of mr. clean
and i got the freshness of listerine
cuz i don fight dirrty...
i'll leave that for that aguilera bitch
1 punch from me...
will leave ya jaw jiggling, like a pair of tits
bullshit freestyle while im sittin in school
i spit sick...
like kids who drink the water after i piss in the pool
so follow me to equality, to our own colony
sure i can make mistakes, but i make no apologies
leave them in verbal poverty, no evasion
you get fucked like pamela anderson on vacation
im hot kids, i leave burn scars like pepper sprayers
i will rise to power, like hitler in elevators

You know these verbs give my words
the action that they need
givin killaz satisfaction
the only reaction is re-traction of ya rymes
it happens so many timez
that killaz get affraid of the linez i wrote
Makin you choke back the fact that you aint got shit to say
drop you off the bay pier side
lets ride jump in the car
I aint never gana die so dont try to hard
Dont be jealous fellas cause im takin ya gurl for a twirl
around the world
just cause she like the ghetto freak
You dont gata try to hit my cheek and be a hater
i got you breathin harder then darth vader on a resporater
and i got your heart beatin faster then a paster with a new boy
this buisness aint a game and it aint no toy
but im doin shit for the joy
all you haters think i get paid
the only think im gettin that you aint is gettin laid
So next time you get frayed out about me
just rember i aint rich
you just poorer then me

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i think this collab needs work from bnoth verses...first verse was stronger then 2nd but i think you both could have enhanced yourt structure and flow, some good wordplay creativity but i think you could have both done better....but with out a doubt this was an okie read peace 6.5/10

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

i think the first verse was more metaphorically inclined and the second was more gutter but both hot