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Old 11-02-03, 01:28 PM   #1
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...Setting Goals...

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replied to- Theives - thats life
saltheking - explanation
Alias-C - cant write about it


Setting goals is the way to elevation
Yes It’s the road to higher creation
Keep on track, keep co-ordination
With Determination and forward thin-kin……

Life’s a journey, many twisting roads, paths to change some for better some to worse
That’s why setting goals helps you achieve your role becoming more diverse
The curse of drifting through, wondering what should do, holding ya to
The shackles, the set in glue, break the mould, expand ya thoughts
Don’t settle for standard, battles been fought for the right to freedom of sort
Such diverse variety of routes to take in society, so choose em wisely
Cos they’ll comprise you for every event, when it comes unexpected in relent
If ya haven’t planned it out, less time to lay the foundations set the cement
Its like a war being fought, ya get caught, without instructions to imp-lement

Setting goals is the way to elevation
Yes It’s the road to higher creation
Keep on track, keep co-ordination
With Determination and forward thin-kin……

What ever you do, stick to a format to fall back, that’s good for you
Don’t get caught short, be prepared for any eventuality cos its true
Preparation’s like making options, like making a cushion to fall back on-to
Ensuring that satisfaction be lasting, not left home while the world is passing
I don’t mean live a roster, I mean be clever so you never, end up crashing
Incarceration comes from poor planning, not bad luck through things collapsing
Things only happen for a reason, breeding events through well composed actions
Trial and error through ‘visions’ literal decisions building memories through livin
Just remember one thing, that in every war There’s gonna be some pain and killin

Setting goals is the way to elevation
Yes It’s the road to higher creation
Keep on track, keep co-ordination
With Determination and forward thin-kin……
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Old 11-02-03, 05:53 PM   #2
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uppin for some feedback........................
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Old 11-02-03, 07:32 PM   #3
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This was an aiight drop...

Some of the ending were abit choppy...

Work on that alittle...

Other than that, I enjoyed it...

The chorus was my favorite...

Keep elevating and sending them...
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Old 11-04-03, 06:58 AM   #4
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thanx for the feedback dawg...............i'll keep an eye out for your shit....aight......peace!..........

......can i have some more feed here.....plz........
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Old 11-04-03, 03:27 PM   #5
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yeah man good drop....flow was pretty good i thought, fell off at a few points but it was good anyway....i agree with goth the chorus was nicely done....liked the vocab....overall this was a pretty good piece....keep at it.....and keep dropping.
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Old 11-06-03, 08:19 AM   #6
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feedack

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Flow was ok, bit chopped up at the end but its all good
vocab was great
chorus was nice
overall it was an ok piece to read..
btw thx for feedback on my piece sorry i havent got a chance to drop on yours for awhile stuffs always busy round here.. anyways stay up
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Old 11-06-03, 10:40 AM   #7
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this was a good drop i liked the cement and relent line. it had a nice flow to it. i don't like how you used thin...kin in the verse. it doesn't really go.
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Old 11-06-03, 05:05 PM   #8
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uppin...........................
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.............and thnx for feedin it!
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Old 11-06-03, 05:08 PM   #9
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Decent. Flow Was Off At Sum Points
But Overall, The Depth Was Okay

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Old 11-08-03, 08:29 PM   #10
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uppin for some more feedback.......thanx yall
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