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Old 11-02-03, 07:42 PM   #1
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...My Brother...(True)

IP: 0C63 A5AA

This is a true story/song about my brother...

He's in a correctional center right now...(Jail)

Just listen and hear what I'm sayin...


Lo: http://www.soundclick.com/util/stre...?ID=664829&q=Lo
Hi: http://www.soundclick.com/util/stre...?ID=664829&q=Hi

Last edited by Gothika : 11-02-03 at 08:00 PM.
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Old 11-02-03, 10:40 PM   #2
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Old 11-02-03, 11:20 PM   #3
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This beat is dope, I'm feeling it. Quality isn't good and I'm sure you know that, so I'm trying to block it out. Emotion could go up, it's not terrible, but it sounds like your just reading your rhymes off of a sheet of paper. Flow was ok, alot of lines were forced. Story telling was pretty good, but your flow drew away from understanding the story. Delivery was decent, everything was pretty clear. LoL @ you making gun sounds with you mouth. LoL, that was funny duke. This was ok, has lots of room for improvement. The ending should have been faded out or something. Keep it up though dude, talent is present.
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Old 11-03-03, 12:38 AM   #4
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ight lsitenin now...beat seems koo little freaky type shit...quality could be upped...ya could move a little away from the mic...will help...could use ads...but ya lyrics are nice man...flow and delivery is ight...to many high volume parts...but ya lyrics are nice overall the whole thing...nice shit...
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