I replied to Masta C feat. GenePool "Lies"

ILLunatic "Tragedy Due To Hate"

Lil_Jules_uk "Quick Rap"


"My Life So Far"

I keep my friends close but now my enemies closa
u neva know when dey bring gats witout any hoastas
I’m only doin shit jus how we supposed ta,
Eryday I look in da mirra and say how did he mold ya//
Now when I say he I’m talkin bout my pop,
He was harldy in my life he would only make quick drops,
In an out man but it seem like now dat,
I’ma grown man and risin he tryna keep me grounded//
I’m thinkin man u wasn’t there fa half my fuckin child hood,
But u comin round again and u thinkin dat it’s now good,
If I can ask him den I’d be like nigga how could,
U not be in my life fully to get raised like a child should//
Ma was alwayz there she was my fatha and my motha,
And she worked hard to raise me my sista and my three brothas,
She'd take care of us all day and tuck us unda covas,
So dad da way u are right now I’m not too sure I love ya//

Chorus:X2
I'm lettin erybody know how my life has been goin so far,
it aint neva no sunshine it dont be shinnin like no star,
eryday I'm tired and seein red like sonars,
but no matter wut happen to ur boy I'll tell u dat I wont fall//

When u drinkin and arguin u don’t know how bad I wanna shove ya,
And tell u to ur face dat u’s a lousy mutha fucka,
If u don’t keep a promise den how we gonna trust ya,
U tell ma u gon stop drinkin den u go and get anotha//
Bottle of dat yack man u make wanna crack,
Dat fuckin bottle on da ground now wutchu thinkin about dat,
U da reason I was drunk when broke up wit Elizabeth,
I neva thought dat I fill my throat up wit a fifth of Gin//
I guess u can say dat Red Wun a chip off da old block,
cuz erybody say I look like a light skin version of my old pops,
and eryone of ur traits rubbin off on me dad it wont stop,
it's jus a metter of time b4 I fully change and da whole clock//
make me evolve into wut it is dat u r today dad,
and dat is a old lonely drunk helpless and strange man,
u think yellin at me dad is gon change my ways man,
too bad u turned me into u and aint no way I can change back//

Chorus:X2
I'm lettin erybody know how my life has been goin so far,
it aint neva no sunshine it dont be shinnin like no star,
eryday I'm tired and seein red like sonars,
but no matter wut happen to ur boy I'll tell u dat I wont fall//

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Feed back plz. Anyone? Good or bad. But no dissin. If u gon dis den do it in da right place.

Aight where is da feed back?? Come on now.

yo i liked it , nice peice, got room for improvement though, get droppin gd shit, peace x

yeah I know I need improvement. I mention dat in da self glorification cyfer. More feedback