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Old 11-11-03, 12:04 PM   #1
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[Stay Original.]

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Forget flavourings, have concepts savouring
Correct labouring, instead of inept wavering
Frets craving to be disciple, ending as a typo
Potents blazing self titles, amending the biro
I'm sending virals, so no one shakes pot off
Inventin my style, so ones asking whats hot
You've got pot, a difference between uniuqe
& being a freak that peeps know as different
Instead of, those that involves their ignorant
You can't control figments, just let them free
Get them to be something people strumming
& keep on bumping too like retards to shelfs
Keep far from help, so you can evolve as you
I write words plane so I haven't common flu
Coming at you dis-eased everytime I breath
You'll think of me,
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Old 11-11-03, 04:54 PM   #2
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the struture to this was heavy
Forget flavourings, have concepts savouring
Correct labouring, instead of inept wavering
you opened it well
dunno wat really much to say blud that was just ill
nice!
safe
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Old 11-11-03, 05:00 PM   #3
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Opening four or so lines were dope, nice flow and multi's wise, the internals worked, only real flkaw was the content cause it was like you were just rhyming syllables but with no point being made or saying anything, and that really let it down for me. Transition was decent, kept the piece moving along without dwindling on a particlar thought or idea for too long, held my interest, kept the flow nice, but still - content wise, i wasnt feeling this piece.

Sorry bro. = /
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Old 11-12-03, 07:38 AM   #4
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its cool. .

honesty is the best policy, not as many metas as i would have liked, so ima work on that & generally the depth. .

Pz
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