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11-11-03, 12:04 PM | #1 | ||||||
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[Stay Original.]
IP: 659B AFC6
Forget flavourings, have concepts savouring
Correct labouring, instead of inept wavering Frets craving to be disciple, ending as a typo Potents blazing self titles, amending the biro I'm sending virals, so no one shakes pot off Inventin my style, so ones asking whats hot You've got pot, a difference between uniuqe & being a freak that peeps know as different Instead of, those that involves their ignorant You can't control figments, just let them free Get them to be something people strumming & keep on bumping too like retards to shelfs Keep far from help, so you can evolve as you I write words plane so I haven't common flu Coming at you dis-eased everytime I breath You'll think of me, |
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11-11-03, 04:54 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: DF7B C8F7
the struture to this was heavy
Forget flavourings, have concepts savouring Correct labouring, instead of inept wavering you opened it well dunno wat really much to say blud that was just ill nice! safe |
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11-11-03, 05:00 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: ABE5 FC72
Opening four or so lines were dope, nice flow and multi's wise, the internals worked, only real flkaw was the content cause it was like you were just rhyming syllables but with no point being made or saying anything, and that really let it down for me. Transition was decent, kept the piece moving along without dwindling on a particlar thought or idea for too long, held my interest, kept the flow nice, but still - content wise, i wasnt feeling this piece.
Sorry bro. = / |
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11-12-03, 07:38 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 2D46 820F
its cool. .
honesty is the best policy, not as many metas as i would have liked, so ima work on that & generally the depth. . Pz |
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