Devils and Demons racing through anybody's Mind
Stealing Your Watch, They know when it's Your Time
You see, the classic embodiements of hell and fire
Lucifer, to which all evil and sin was to be inspired
Couldn't figure it out, He was Jealous of God's Power
An angel who is stout, But then figured out in horror
God already had a plan, everything is written in stone
You can try to scratch, but it will never change what God Wrote

On another note......

I want to release my mind, but my soul ain't letting go
My soul consumed by evil, like so many others before
My sins are like a fire, sonsumes me when I try to be right
They're like my mind, when it consumes me as I write
But who are we,maybe we're dumb not knowing left from right
maybe our intellectual future, comes in cases of aborted fetuses
Some of you are for it, but thats our future,you'll agree on this
Maybe, some of you mistake me, trying to say that wer'e stupid
Well Your right, Pimps Up Hoez Down,and we ain't degradin our women????
It's too late to figure out, what others are seeming to know
We fear the unknown, thats Why we don't try to even learn
Just too quick to judge, Labels on cans and not on our People
If we Treated life like math, and we know we have equals
There wouldn't be problems, but then again, it doesn't matter
If you don't care of your future you shouldn't have had her.

Lucifer........................................... ..sin,son and daughter of evil.

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I was feelin this piece man. Good vocab and great flow, never fell off, which is good. Good meanin in the piece and I liked how you ended it.

Just too quick to judge, Labels on cans and not on our People
If we Treated life like math, and we know we have equals
^^ Dope bar, and I agree. . . Too much dividing going on, I mean shit, if you sit down and think about it, we are all different in our own way, but we are the same too.

Nice drop man, keep um coming.

-Formula.

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^^ Feedback appreciated dog.

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this piece was ok...the content was nice and you had some quotables (but I can't quote cuz of my stupid ass computer)..your flow was on point too but you seriously need to work on your rhymescheme...because you didn't have multis or even decent rhymes in this...this would be a GREAT poem but in hiphop things are diffrent..like some dude said a long time ago, "It's not what you say, but how you say it" that relates to this piece...you said a lot of meaningful things but I just don't feel like you said them right...the main goal of making ANY hiphop track is to say whatever you want to say but also say it with style...so say what you gotta say or w/e but make sure you're doing it with skill also...other than the weakness in the rhymes the piece was pretty dope....just elevate on that tip and try not to take my criticism as a bad thing

peace

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^up you sleeping Bastards!

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yo, that was pretty slick, i liked it...
really flowed nicely n i could follow it...
not to mention it was like many of my flows (tha topic)...
hope to read more from u...

peep minez if u can...

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Arriba!

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