.:Potent:.

Don't know if my delivery should be natural or cesarian
I'm soon to feel these miss-steaks like I'm a vegetarian
Wrists break cuz my missed mates won't gimme a hand
Another piss take with my wish fake. .thats my mistake

. .The more I debate on this it makes me infertile
But thats the problem
Soon I should realise how to awake to versatile
Still in tacts my goblin
With no attacks to stop him
My raps could be hobbling
Yet I think attatching sovereigns
Has you topping. .
Like your the sweet sprinkles
Deplete tinkles cuz soon i'll have a sex fetish
The way I crinkle like i'm mack-canes
Then cut my self up over it like my heads lettuce
My mistakes have me racked-brains
Re-tracks remain like im Sal-Vs songs
Contemplating, whether I can be wrong
But I ain't. .I Strutt faint
From all mistakes that scar within
The skin deep ones pars are given
I'm hard hitting like male pornstars
Was it a mistake?
That I was able to flail i'm born hard
I recon I slipped awake
The second my dad stopped to penetrate
If you've public renovate
Are you going to hate it
& show changing rooms
Or need the latest
So I slack of homework
Your domes worse than the Eden projects
Leading odd trecks like the number line
Its a mistake. .
For you to have an incite them slumber mine
My spits rates
Like those of house prices
Hype & prices entyse this

.:Edicius:.

Wrong judgements misunderstandings for god sakes,
tryin to keep it in hand &still life is filled with mistakes.

Often i think im doing whats right but it ends wrong,
mostly i'm writin those concepts down in to a song.
But sometimes its impossible i cant write that! why?,
i dont like to express useally this deep ill rather die.
But acceptions sometimes being made and u'll see,
expressin thru my pen is the only way i can be free.


Is it the message,sended to u makin ur ground shakes,
i can shock u but..u'll just see my life is full of mistakes!.

o'kay, i'll hit three links in this later

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&postid=916070#post916070

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6073#post916073

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=92540

But i only show 4 lines of my usula style, after that I try to use a totally different flow. .Feedback y'all. .

Yes. .

Don't know if my delivery should be natural or cesarian
I'm soon to feel these miss-steaks like I'm a vegetarian

^^^lol, i liked this line, funny^^^

i liked the structure
every other line ryhmin,
seemed like a parody

The skin deep ones pars are given
I'm hard hitting like male pornstars
^^^lol^^^
nice drop, pretty funny.

edicus with the words that made sense at the end.

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Wasnt a bad piece, flow to Potents verse came off nice in this, seemed like he's been reading Ias at RnR, lol, `miss-steaks` line is hella played, it actually made me cringe when i read it, lol. Aside from that - it wasnt bad, you carried the piece really, content wise if nothing else, seemed to me like you'd already wrote to this topic then you just sent it Edicius to finish off to call it a collab. His verse wasnt bad, porn stars lines are usually played as fuck but he flipped that one pretty decent, all in all this wasnt bad, made for a decent read, i liked it.

Holla atcha boii!

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