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11-20-03, 02:42 PM | #1 | ||||||
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diss to HANDCUFFS
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replied to threads VVVVVVVVVVV
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...=&threadid=9227 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=92920 To smash this kid with pyshical abuse, wat this kid expects is a typical truce Love to watch as this kids dreams come true freepost a few and battle never anyone new He likes this shit, he was banned as kwik he just thought his ryhmes they jus were to sick but to acknowledge his wackness ill give ya linkclick here for verse ooh now tell me that shit dont stink Likes to jus give a few minor to replies but when it comes to his shit hes a lit timer to cry hated him ive got personals too wanna be crip he dyde his hair blue white man tend to think he black tryd to rap but says he aint wack try pullin up your pants and not try to act we know how often you tend not tell facts eh jus wanted ta try and diss yep thas it Last edited by Kclipz 4 Murkin : 11-20-03 at 02:45 PM. |
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11-20-03, 02:58 PM | #2 | ||||
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U can do better than that. It sounds like you're doing spoken word. They do have a forum for poetry.
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11-20-03, 03:14 PM | #3 | ||||||
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i do do poetry also u kno its in there right now old but ive got thme there so stfu
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11-20-03, 03:16 PM | #4 | ||||
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That's cool, poetry is a big part of rapn' also. If you could do both good you get better faster.
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!HOLLA AT YOUR BOY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's Marvell man don't act sassy// Or i'll leave you like a used tampon, stiff, bloody and nasty// "Blessings of life to the children, they say life is like 5 days, words of an oldman in a wheelchair, with silver hair, his eyes where bloody, while describing what lies before me, said evil b*tches and jealous men would try to destroy me, it occured to me this old ni99as words couldn't be realler, i'm on top now slightest drama i have to kill ya, cause animals sense weakness, sharks smell blood in water, ismail mosses and joe, move in devine order, sh*t is plastic material having no life, crash whips and leave 'em know matter the price, as long as I survive hop in the five, circle the block where the beefs at and park in front of my enemies eyes, we see that it's war we're gods children, see what we livin is real, aint no heaven or hell, dead is dead f*ckers, and your soul is with god, your mind keeps lurking the earth watching your own murder reoccur" - Nas |
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12-30-03, 02:06 AM | #5 | ||||||
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oh my god, i just fucken saw this, it is gay
LMAO!!! |
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12-30-03, 02:54 AM | #6 | ||||||
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wow you suck
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12-30-03, 02:58 AM | #7 | |||||||
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its straight dog use multis though that will liven up this piece of work
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12-30-03, 05:08 PM | #8 | ||||||
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Was short and you had a nice topic. I just think you could have done more with it. I like the way in the middle you put that link, but it doesn't make the piece any better. You need to make the lyrics more complex and have them make a little more sense. I think if this was a little longer it would have been boring. You can do better. I will read more.
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12-30-03, 05:29 PM | #9 | |||||||
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Ok for all you faggots who just say it's wack... YOUR WACK... Give the kid constructive critisizm.. Ok man the flow at the start was nice.. Multi's was cool.. But you really gotta learn how to punch and get solid personals... Use mroe wordplay to get witty.. The best thing to do in a diss is to make people laugh.. So try and be funny with your punchs... Get at me on aim for help ( BlaCkDaZe001 ).. Keep at it kiddo.. Peace
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01-05-04, 06:10 AM | #10 | |||||||
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yo diss was funny made me laugh yo, but you coulda put some mo to it, made it longer, but if you keep rhyming you'll produce better diss skits, piece yo! |
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01-05-04, 08:12 AM | #11 | ||||||
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i know you can come a lot harder than this, next time let me get in on an handcuffs diss, i wanna tear him up, for lookin like prince harry!!!
you jus need to come harder, i seen ur netter pieces than this!!! peace |
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01-05-04, 09:12 AM | #12 | ||||||
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ya didnt diss him hard at all.............structure needs work....and like classx said usin more wordplay wll make it better
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