yo sup peeps juss tell me wat chu think about my freestyle. Im tryna elevate so holla mayn 1~

Where's your freestyle??

yo mayn its ryt here sorry haha

uppin fa feedback yo

Where ya links at??

Heres the freestyle i did everyone:

With my 4-5 bias get erased…they use to the 9 mm shells smokin taste//
Makin you vacate the place…..the cops and FBI cant even find a trace//
Ya head need at brace….Hit ya so hard make ya noggin fall outta place//

Some cats wanna get spirit lifted……..with skills they neva could retain even if dey parents was gifted//
The rhymes im sik with……but wack rappas juss ryde on dik and don’t quit//
Gangsta poppin mah mack until all ammo run out……got ya @ss runnin like runnin to the south//

Trigga finga held down at make ya figure…….Im the realest nikka to make ya whole body shiver//
Aimin better than you …. I even clap quiker//
You prolly wont even hold a gun son……. Nuts be smaller than dem nuts in snickers//
All you do is bicker……people so bored of you the become automatic nose diggers//

Like G-unit I make ya beg fa mercy…..you wishin one day you could spit and murk me//
Too pooc to hold ya own when I unleash the fury…..Leave you 6 feet under the dirt you burried//
Im like a rock im sturdy………none of ya disses can ever really hurt me//
No need to hurry………….I got punch lines that hit you Im Sure-Ly//

When you rhyme no one feels ya style…..ya spits need sharpenin like a nail and a file//
Don’t touch the dial you cant reach help………people cant help kidz like you who spazz out on the tile//

So hot I make the grounds I step to melt…….walkin with 2 guns on mah belt//
The pistol to ya head you felt…….cock the nyne back with the finger on the trigger…now you a fag like Elt(Elton john)//

I splatta ya brains out from ya fat @ss cranium……he didn’t wanna listen so I had to start sprayin em//
This bias actin dumb but I juss shun……..beat this kid down like a drumline’s drum//
Leavin him on the cement up in the slums……Im not the one who wanted some more of mah boys cum //

aiiight, but lacked an actual topic for you to write bout and du=iscuss, therefore it wasd jumbled........not bad tho

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thanks nok'd vizion appreciate the feedback

I just signed up to the board, and thats the first rap I read that I actually liked. I cant really say what parts were better than others, it all flowed together and thats what counts

hey, they got niggas in hawaii?

yup fa sho mayn thanks for da feedback though yo

yayo u garbage ass hell less battle son