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“ We swear that we will take part in these Olympic Games in the true spirit of sportsmanship, and that we will respect and abide by the rules that govern them, for the glory of sport and the honor of our country.” Athens: The 2004 Olympic Games As the competitors jogged out, the Crowd Released A thunderous Sound Beneath the soft Clouds of Greece Astounding Athletes .. Smiled, Clapped and Cheered The stadium erupted .. Mild Laughter in their Air Past Years saw champions crowned, world record Times Set & now its time for them to shine as their Country’s Finest it Requires full concentration, a lean Physique and Style But that place on the podium makes all the Training Worth While To know you’ve competed & won medals among the Gods of Age and they Anticipate the Olympic Torch that’ll Start the Games . . . As the events were announced, you could see the Sweat on his Shirt His eyes looking to sky, and he was Desperate for First This was the moment he’d trained for, to be Privileged of Gold The beads of sweat Bungee Jumping from the Bridge in his Nose Feeling hopefull .. he isolated himself in Stretch four All that stood between him & first place was the Length of the Course Eighteen hundred meters straight sprint after the Starters Gun To win he knows he must perform at the Hardest he’s Run Adrenaline Pumping his Muscles as he Entered the Blocks Concentration at Breaking point, tryna Center his Thoughts “Set” was called .. the Moment Of Truth had Finally Arrived, but this Teenage Phenomenon had his Eyes set on the Prize of crossing the Finish Line first .. making 4th the Wonder Lane and with a final gun shot, the Race was now Underway He’d Heard It Late .. not the Greatest Break, but roughly even and Tied for fifth place with Urlah Tamovich of Sweden Every second now counted .. first bend Fastly Approaching .. The athlete from Uganda left a tight gap Vastly Open .. Our Sensation cut the inside .. now Pushing for Third Place His anatomy at full stretch .. and Rushing with Pace Arms flailing on the Straight .. this was his chance to Take The Lead His chance to pull ahead of the leading pack at Breaking Speed the Aching Knees didnt deter him .. he retained a Firm Focus Now in second place, but lookin toward the finish where His Hope Was Neck and Neck, the Swede & Czech as they reached the final bend, It was all down to determination, and who could go that extra length Could this break the record attempt? The audience Gasped at the Screens as the Czech Republic took first with a time of Four Fifteen Beating the record no one's managed the Last Ten Years with a standing ovation from the crowd as he Collapsed In Tears . . . Next Day, the Czech's Name was on the tabloid's Headline Beneath the exclusive "An Olympic Cheat: Fined!" He'd Declined to comment further, and so now as the Records State The gold medal was Awarded to the German in Second Place Scientists led various tests, found Traces in his Blood Indicating the Czech had used a Performance Enhancing Drug He was later Banned from the Sport, his track Career was Finished "Sure its the taking part that counts, but you only take Part To Win It I'd of shed Blood for this Sport, now i've a heavy Diss-Taste I guess my Competitive Edge proved my Biggest Mistake. A Living Great was something id always Aspired to Achieve I put my Blood and Sweat into this Sport, and thats what cost me. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95803 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95900 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95917 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...48&pagenumber=3 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95861
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Nice story tellin here = ) ..concept well used..with some decent vocab , ..a nice flow, ..and up to date info , ..lol^
The gold medal was Awarded to the German in Second Place Scientists led various tests, found Traces in his Blood Indicating the Czech had used a Performance Enhancing Drug He was later Banned from the Sport, his track Career was Finished "Sure its the taking part that counts, but you only take Part To Win It I'd of shed Blood for this Sport, now i've a heavy Diss-Taste I guess my Competitive Edge proved my Biggest Mistake. Nice read, interesting topic = ) But follow rules, 3 names/links to open mics u replyed to else this wil be deleted.. Have a nice day..
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cam you can really write welll,
being able to go to any topic aqnd place the reader there is a hell of talent.....you used great scheme and discriptive reference... complexity switching to simple and fallowed on topic sequence.....this was a really good read. |
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Wordness.
It looks better when centered, like that it looks fucking horrible. But yeah .. i'll find my three links later. I reply to heaps of stuff in here anyways, its just usually as an alias .. = )
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that was a tight drop, you always come ill on open mics though you bastered lol
it was amazing how well you stayed onto the topic and actually gave us real info great way to do a topic also your vocab was really good very good drop keep it up man if ye got time could you hit up my battle it's in my sig...thanks
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Arrite.
Edicius - check your PM's before you close this for having no links you cunt! Dont worry hoe = ) -Edicius
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iller than yall: wait right there
pitchblackprism: lol iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95803 iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95900 iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95917 iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...48&pagenumber=3 iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95861 pitchblackprism: what? iller than yall: ^ links to open mics i replied to
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well, this was a good read, but it lacked the usual large amount of wordplay and metas that you usually have.
the nicest part of this was it's storytelling. The use of the pledge as the introduction was effective and would make a good voiceover for an audio. The race was described pretty well, but what I couldn't figure out was "awarded to the german in second" wasn't the swede in second? its madness! I liked the soft clouds of Greece. the sound of it makes me sleepy. LoL not bad my man.
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i thought this was ill,your story tellin is off the hook.and it had good flow and decend verbals.
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Yeah, Maven .. this was the rough copy i posted up, edited a few of the misspellings etc, on the one at RnR it does say 'Swede' in second ; )
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Lol i Caught That Too..
Deff Good Shit Here.. The Story Tellin Kept Me Hooked On The Story n' Kept Me Reading It.. Imagery Was Great Quote:
^^ And that Was What I Was Tlkin About Great SHit, Wordplay Coulda Helped It But Overall, It Was An Enjoyable Read. |
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This Was Dope Cam. The Story Tellin' Was Absolutely Incredible. You Had Plenty Of Multi's In This Piece, And When Used, They Were Great. Flow Was Smooth Throughout, Adding To The Dopeness Of This Piece. The Story Tellin' Is What Put This Piece Over The Top Tho, As Did The Vivid Details.
The beads of sweat Bungee Jumping from the Bridge in his Nose ^^ Fantastic Detail. . A Living Great was something id always Aspired to Achieve I put my Blood and Sweat into this Sport, and thats what cost me ^^ Great Way To End It. Your Ability To Take A Topic Like This And Turn It Into A Dope Piece Is Amazing. I Commend You For That. I Thoroughly Enjoyed The Read. . Keep Droppin Cam. -Formula. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95830 ^^ Feedback Appreciated.
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hmmm interesting topic to pick the name of this made me want to read it cause i like bloody gruesome things nice flowing conept multie flowed well together in each line your consistancy was thoro and very well thought out ..holla ...8/10
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^ Haha .. this wasnt my topic, its from the RnR topical league .. topic was 'Blood Sport' .. just tried to steer away from the whole 'Van Damme' theme to it .. came up w. this
I'll reply to your pieces when i get home later ..
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yeah that was tight for sure never heard any flow about that
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