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Old 12-02-03, 06:33 PM   #1
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through ma eyez

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yo the heavanly fathers cant look down on me, so forcefully
i'll hit u punches, this shit's a dictatorship, not a democracy
the cypha'll make u scream, levitate, while u masterbate, have u screamin for ur momma
lets not procrastinate, discriminate, the way i make her holla
its all about the money, hunny, throwin spits and doin drugs
make an incision, causin the price of livin, leave u sleepin wit slugs
burned ya internally, im ur only obstacle so hurdle me
dyer measures, mark cali fires as pleasure, so suck on ma gurdle
know i kno the cemetary, might seem a little scary, fuckin bitches is ma thrill
save the shit thats mushy, cuz u eat around the tushy, eatin 'pussy', and usin u as ma 'cherry' kill
ejaculation leaves sanitation, u stopped flowin like sufferin from constipation
masturbation was the only way u spit, so i'll end this shit, so i can do a assassin/biggie/tupac collaboration
y did u turn me away? is it cuz ma game wasnt tighter than a 5th grade virgin
im not the eminem version, i dont have r.kelly perversion?
i dont rape little gurls, i dont wanna ma momma to leave this world, cuz im on visititations
y did u turn me away? guess it dont matta, those were ur last words newayz, salutations
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Old 12-03-03, 04:18 PM   #2
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comon guyz feedback plz
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Old 12-03-03, 04:27 PM   #3
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You need to leave 3 links and 3 names of peoples you left feedback in or this will get deleted...

But this was alright i thought...your structure needs some work though, you have some stretched lines, try making them a little shorter and around the same length so its good structure...flow in this was alright, could use some more multies though i think to make it better...but overall this was alright...keep at it.
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