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kmfrob
masta c
edicius



yo, mayne-u niggaz need to feel this, yo lot talk about wackness ha ha, this bitch is too wack..


i dont give a fuck my mac lets off too many shots
ready to die ready to kill i pull my sornoff
straight outta jail i aint nothing to loose, fuck it
wackness is yo strong point james, u full of bullshit
remember 'i shot ya' aimed straight at lesaine crooks
mayne fuck you, i show you my fist and make u dun shook
see me i keep it real, but u an ja-rule straight pussy
i got scarface cleaning my shoes, while i take tims money
dr dr how many times you gonna bust them same rhymes
keep on fronting coz u rap 4 hoes, while i pull them nines
d.e.f. jam aint saying shit, i rob james and take his bitch
take that mike from off yo chain, coz u cant even spit
da only thing me and you got in common is that we both black
but i remain a g, while u fuck men and take crack
i never seen or herd a bitch like you front
in yo hood every night drinking juice and bunnin that same blunt
you licking yo lips damm, u atractin tha wrong attention
i know yo ass shook, every1 knows of 2pacs resserection
but dont be scared dogg i herd ja really likes you
team up wit yo team dogg, b4 i snipe you.



pussy

your structure needs a little work, your lines all all mixed length, ranging really long and pretty short.

some wack wordplay, and some aiight,
expand you vocabulary.

aiight drop,
not the best thought.


peep 'racist' me and TAG collab, i'm putting it up soon

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I think double-0 seven was a little harsh on the structure coz it wasnt as bad as he made it sound but it wasnt really good either. Just elevate.
As for your rhymescheme, I wasnt really feelin it much, you need to be a little more creative and add some multi's and you'll do a lot better.
Overall I've seen worse but the whole topic I wasnt really feelin.
keep droppin and practisin. 5/10

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