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Old 12-06-03, 10:47 PM   #1
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I met a girl on the net, it was like an instant connect
Don’t normally do it but this one I truly respect, I confess
Probably never meet, its not like we live over the street
Its no small feat, cos we’re oceans apart,
So it’s disastrous from the start
So, dunno if I should really embark... was it meant to be?
Started, as an IM got talking.. found she was the same as me
Undeniably.. it’s not ideal, but we like doin the same things
And she rings to my tone so brings us closer to home
Free spirits drawn like a magnet to a pin
Within a radius of the world, each time we speak drawing us closer in
So comfortable we can talk for hours yet it seems like 5 mins
Cos It’s so easy to relate not fake must be like fate
Jus Two of the same Bringing goose bumps to my skin and makes
Me think does it really matter
Space is just a place it doesn’t have to be a disaster
Its just a point in time both online and we got speaking
Got closer but in the long run.. WHY? Cos we wont be meeting….
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Old 12-06-03, 11:00 PM   #2
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Its a good rhyme
kind of bored me as a subject to write on
but it seems u got me intersted
which is talent to hang on to in top. battles
and top. tournements
Gg.
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Old 12-06-03, 11:22 PM   #3
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Yeah i agree man this was a pretty good piece...I felt the emotion in this as i read through it...you had some good metas in there i thought...flow in this was pretty good stayed on point mostly...it lacked your normal vocab, but you got your point across i felt...overall it was good piece...keep at it.
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Old 12-06-03, 11:28 PM   #4
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This was tight man. The flow was nice. All though it threw me off with the street line for a sec. Otherwise this was dope. keep spittin man.
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Old 12-06-03, 11:44 PM   #5
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not to interesting but.. its aiight... pick a different subject to write about man...
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Old 12-07-03, 12:16 AM   #6
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YO dawg that was A nice Drop dawg Nice and Short......Good Topic.....not much to complain about....Good FLow through it..there was Metas....Had alot Of emotion and got me thinken about it.....Allround a Tight Piece Aiight Kuz Peace

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