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Old 12-09-03, 05:45 PM   #1
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Bow B4 ur master mutha fuckers!
haha
yea! La! only mutha fucker alive who can put it
down like a true G!
Lets get it started!

I can make it happen 4rm Oaktown 2 Straton
One foot in da club an dese bitches is in my lap dancin
The romance'in iz so relaxin plus pussys almost promiced
Fuckin in da back a my jeep like were at da beach in da Bahamas
Bare dick no condoms only skin between der lips, slip in my anaconda an watch it wonder through her hips

Im feelin da love in her, an watchin her legs quiver
am i wrong, hustle'in dese bitches up & down like drugdealers
haha
Thinkin yall can play a cracker, i buck up an watch em back up
zip up de jacket an run out da back, b4 i cap em
notorious 4 my methods, shady and violent measures
My lyrics r so raw that they had 2 B fuckin cencored
burnin witnesses eyes out wit fuckin car lighters
So I cant be identified if draged into a line up
the authoritys ul never catch me slippin
sippin 22's in the living room fuckin trippin
Go out shootin on dese playa haters!

slighted but never faded!
My enemys is waitin!
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Mutha Fuckers!
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Affiliated 4 lyfe
u know how i do

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Old 12-09-03, 05:54 PM   #2
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yo man u need to put 3 people u posted 2 or ur thread gonna b deleted

but it was tight piece

i like the way u described shit in there n ur flow was flowin
jus elevate on vocab n ur shit will b tiught a hell

return de favor
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Old 12-09-03, 06:13 PM   #3
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^ Like he said.
Vocab could use some work.
Wordplay and flow was all right.
Use some more multies.
8/10.
Keep em coming.
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Old 12-09-03, 06:54 PM   #4
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This was ok....your structure needs some work though, in the begining it was alright kinda, try not to make your lines too long or too short like you have, try keeping them around the same length so it helps the flow out....also try adding some multies to help the flow out as well...but keep elevating and keep at it.
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