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12-09-03, 08:48 PM | #1 | |||
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Once Again
IP: 8C94 B79E
You’re gone and
The whispers of sweet melodies once again glide across the room, into my ears and the light’s dim as our souls begin to dance to the same slow jam, hands glide down my sides and our love incenses the room. The melodies of each song intertwine, as does our bodies. Lost in a zone of ecstasy, your emotions are casted into my heart and I love him once again. This stranger I’ve longed for has seeped out of the pores and created my love, rekindled the worn out flame. But still I know him not. Days go by and we breathe hand in hand once again. As I pray for the unknown to never leave, I feel the change as the body re-saturates in hatred and mine in confusion. I look into the mirror and see the blackness of bruise re-surface under my eye, and the tears scold my cheeks. Once again I look for the strangers eyes, the one who just held me close, but I get lost in the trench of evil, and I realize your back.
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~.:Soft Focus:.~ {--Deacon (\_/~\_/) Content --} {-Calisto (\_/~\_/) .:Lady Sage:.-} {--Filed (\_/~\_/) Domain 9--} {-Thrust (\_/~\_/) Know1 (\_/~\_/) Emotion-} { --Rule (\_/~\_/) Mental God--} Poetry Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten Understanding Once Again "It requires wisdom to understand wisdom: the music is nothing if the audience is deaf." |
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12-10-03, 12:23 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 1B3B C284
wow nice heart felt poem...i really injoyed it...im not to give a leason due to the more experience you have over me...this peice was sweet i really injoyed it...much respect...
keep writting peace |
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12-10-03, 06:56 PM | #3 | |||
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IP: BD18 A91C
thanks hun
uppin this
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~.:Soft Focus:.~ {--Deacon (\_/~\_/) Content --} {-Calisto (\_/~\_/) .:Lady Sage:.-} {--Filed (\_/~\_/) Domain 9--} {-Thrust (\_/~\_/) Know1 (\_/~\_/) Emotion-} { --Rule (\_/~\_/) Mental God--} Poetry Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten Understanding Once Again "It requires wisdom to understand wisdom: the music is nothing if the audience is deaf." |
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12-10-03, 07:28 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 5B70 C62E
damn nice work .. hard topic ... its good you can express it ... and i hope shit gets better ... keep your head up and dont deal with bullshit you dont have to u kno? ... nice piece
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12-10-03, 10:29 PM | #5 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: 4577 CD9A
I like this even though i thought it was going somewhere else, i feel these topics have become so played, the skill was there but the same story irritated me, 1luv.
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12-11-03, 03:34 PM | #6 | |||||||
Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 4427 B15C
nicely written piece
it seemed to focus more on the message, feelings and thoughts more then any of the technical stuff, like structure, but it still sounds good, and shows i good detail and a strong message. this topic tends to be done quiet a bit, but you still kept me interested and focused on what i was reading. you added your own touch to it. the simple intro drew me for some reason, im not sure why, and the outro was great. keep it up! ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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R.I.P to my lost girl
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12-11-03, 09:56 PM | #7 | |||
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IP: 34F7 7067
thanks for the reply
Babygurl... this isnt personal, but thanks for the concern i really wasnt worrying about complexity or anything i just put my pen on the paper and wrote what came to mind i dont read alot about this topic, so to me it's not played, but w/e i guess thanks for readin uppin??
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~.:Soft Focus:.~ {--Deacon (\_/~\_/) Content --} {-Calisto (\_/~\_/) .:Lady Sage:.-} {--Filed (\_/~\_/) Domain 9--} {-Thrust (\_/~\_/) Know1 (\_/~\_/) Emotion-} { --Rule (\_/~\_/) Mental God--} Poetry Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten Understanding Once Again "It requires wisdom to understand wisdom: the music is nothing if the audience is deaf." |
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12-12-03, 05:16 PM | #8 | |||||||
I Am The Light
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IP: CB2E 7CE0
could you two makeout with me?
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SOFT FOCUS crew record (3-0) Wits end ~ DOI ~ Central....now who's next? sacred scriptures record (5-0) |
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12-13-03, 07:59 AM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: C149 8644
real nice work........you handled the topic well..........very easy to read....keep it up
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12-13-03, 12:00 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: 4262 3F94
THIS WAS GOOD I ENJOYED IT A LOT
KEEP ELAVATING AND WRITE SOME MO SHIT U NOAH MEAN ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ |
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