http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8396#post978396

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8402#post978402

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8387#post978387

a new flip on an oooold subject




excuse me sir, I have a proposition\
have ya ever slept with lot's-a-women\
that are so beutiful ya wife's no competition?\
well, stop-ya-wishin and just ride-on-down\
located half a mile outside-of-town\
always knock twice if the light's-are-down\
how do ya like-the-sound of this excellent-deal\
true sex-wit-appeal all this for the same expense-as-a-meal\
relieve all the tension-ya-feel,\
my girls are open to the worst-suggestion's\
no worries about first-impression's\
because they already down below their skirt-undressin\
I immerse-a-blessin upon your life-of-bore,\
give a get away for the strife-in-store\
because I know somedays everyone would like-a-whore,\
I see nothin wrong with prostitution\
thomas jefferson had a girl on his sack while he was writin' the constitution,\
I pay off the law with a a contribution\
but cash isn't what they stop-in-doin' when there off-duty,\
I got ad's with a facial cum shot askin got-booty?\
so remember if your ever in need of a hot-cutie ta rock-smoothly\
, or a fancy-bitch ta get hella nasty-with\
there's no need-for-appointment's\
and we supply all the best cream's-and-ointments\
when sex with ya girl is seemin-pointless\
just come-ta-the-door\\
and once ya inside you'll be cummin-some-more\
and when ya done-with-a-whore pay up ya lease-at-the-desk\
I take cash mastercard visa-an-checks............

this was a nice approach.....good structure.
discriptive and detailed yet 3rd person narative.
lyrically your gifted and i think you know it.

you dropped a good piece vocab was ok flow and wordplay was good structure was ight over all 7.2/10

lmao... this was good... I'd like to hear more of your shit...
you should place a tryout verse in the Omens...
heres the link: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/for...?s=&forumid=167

~AshY~

CAN YOU GIVE SOME FEED ON MY OPEN MIC: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90958