http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98133
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97944
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90958

my outlook on the net


this flow-of-mine can blow-ya-mind same ol'-design but so-refined when I show-my-rhyme y'all jus grow-behind\
stitched to a hole-in-time ya votes-a-sign when it comes ta dope-ya-blind ya idea of todays smokin-line.... a year ago-was-mine\
hold-ya-shine an never let-go of the net-yo i know ya the best-though cause someone wacker than you said-so\
watch ya head-grow cause vets-show props to ya text-flow but the rest-know its just an exchange for ya next-vote \
I'm not any less-dope study-the-game I still run-it-the-same just lately it seems I got alot less buddies-on-aim\
this dummy-is-lame say ya comin-wit-flame but I make fun-of-ya-shame till i'm laughin so hard my tummies-in-pain\
no sonnin-my-reign keep rappin-away i'll just laugh-when-ya-say shit that was wak-an-was-played back-in-the-day\
you act-in-a-way so massively-gay like ya don't realize tappin-away at the keyboard will neva get ya asses-some-pay\
classics'll-stay copies-will-fade style's choppy-an-played but legends live on long afta they drop-in-the-grave\
ya not-in-my-page sloppy-displays of ya obvious-age should not-be-engaged unless ya staged ta lock-me-in-rage\

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This is some good shit dude, keep that shit up your wordplay was on point and the sturcture is on. Do ya thing

Holla at em.

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slept on battle
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=105181
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113861

Yeah this was alright here....liked the multies in this, they were all over the place...your structure was ok but your lines were stretched but you had like 5 multies in some lines which helped the flow out there...overall alright piece...keep at it.

nice... your bars were stretched... but like C said...
those multies helped... and you made sense with those multies...
very hard to do, but you did it...
if ya want that spot in the Omens... you got it...
just lemme know in the tryout thread.
~AshY~

this was aiight....it seemed tht Ya stretched ya lines to Much shrten them..ya flow coulder Been Betta than it was....The Multis were there which is good they help ya Pieces alot....Yea As A.T. and Masta Said ya Multis were good and ya made sence of them.......all and all a good Open Mic Man....

YO, MY MIND IS BANGIN WITH ALL THOSE MULTI'S. THATS SICK DWAG....................................

good but the flow suffered cos u tried 2 many multi'z

i liked this alot had good imagry and good structure.
nice use of multis which made this flow tight and the wordplay was good
nice drop overall and a good open mic.
keep writing

hit my rhyme
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98014

cheers

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