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Old 12-16-03, 09:22 PM   #1
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The day by day Life.....

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Handcuffs
Word Perfect
Masta C / Mc-Uski

hmm......les get this shit poppin

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Man it's like our job how we patrollin' tha blocks
Dawg it's thier job we can't be controllin' da cops
We kinda like feens when consollin' in rocks
but we still human beings holdin' bitches alot
gotta love the feeling smoke sum viscious pot
Till ya blood itches and clots,
till ya bodies ticker just stops
drinkin' liquerish shnaps,
i got the quickest of hops
tha sickest of drops,
the doc says i need insulin shots
Cuz I'm depictin' a plot, predictin' alot
Next thing you know I'm facin' convictions for pot
Tech's thing is I take my pen and visions just blot
I Don't mistake my friends for decisions to watch
If they not fake our ends can be risen to tha top
Bring ma crew ta ride wit me no division can stop
I don't care what ne1 says Slim on Infinite's hot!
Tha games deap, rushed ta rip in it alot
Tha frame's weak, I just slipped in tha spot
Fuckin' dame freaks bustin' hip's of'em off
"Fuckin' Game" cheats like adjustin her lips ta then cough
This is my list man and i'm wishin' it off
Respect, Techs, Jets I wanna glisten and all
Tech's Neck Gets chics hit and then gone
I Wreck Sex, Bets shit ma game'll git ta da hall
Fuck fame I'm not awaitin' the call
Theres no debatin' no stall,
only Hatin' and Ball, So I'm Statin' no Fall
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They way that I Live, and never give
I'll Say what I Did, to lose clever witt
Felt great with a hit, that severed some shit
Smelt hate in'a bitch, but i weathered it kid
Fuckin' life up blazin' and Cids........
Worries me.....about raisin' my kids

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I'm claimin' the exploration of ya brain containment copassitation,
**Let me get you imaginatin' and agitated,**
Arrangin' segregation trail blazin' gainin' arrangement to relax this nation,
Dis game in ya ears like en-slavement on pace wit dangers engaugin',

Flamin' and Caged-In, Creatin' Hot bars Flamin' Like Cajuin,
Burnin' Like Bacon, I Earn what I'm Takin.........
Learn what I'm brakin'.........Ya face Turned is Relatin'


just drop sum feeding....................




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Old 12-16-03, 09:24 PM   #2
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.
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Old 12-16-03, 09:30 PM   #3
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yo dawg this was a nice OPen Mic....ya Structure seemed Off But still a Good Read And ya FLow was Deent So I enjoyed It.....the Topic was Good I thought So....ya Vocab and Wordplay Posted that Pic In My Head Man..........So With Ya Structure some of ya Lines seemed too short but other wize it was a Nice Piece man....keep them dropin In aiight......p.€.a.c.€.....
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Old 12-16-03, 09:37 PM   #4
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tru...........uppin...........
and Wall to Wall dopeness...............the three names are at the tippity top bro!
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Old 12-16-03, 09:38 PM   #5
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yo this was illness either i slept on you or just plain out am behind the times but you displayed great skill here with limited flaws.
i enjoyed reading you work and look forward to much more
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Old 12-16-03, 11:12 PM   #6
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thanx^uppin....................................... .....dont sleep ppl
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Old 12-17-03, 09:38 AM   #7
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thanx^uppin....................................... .....dont sleep ppl
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Old 12-17-03, 09:49 AM   #8
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Nice It Had Nice Flow, And Nice Wordplay, Nice Vocab
You Stayed On Topic
I Thought That It Was Ill

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Old 12-17-03, 11:53 AM   #9
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Old 12-17-03, 12:25 PM   #10
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yeah all round a decent drop....structure aint shit..so long as its got a flow...i mean its only the way you write it down....you dont have to have a pause after each line..so....to me it didnt come into it....some nice imagery voiced through ya words....liked the burst of multis towards the end....good,, man......pZ.....
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Old 12-17-03, 01:34 PM   #11
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...Hmmm...this piece was well written..you drfted of a little...but you made back up at the end...nice...
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Old 12-17-03, 07:45 PM   #12
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upppin.............dont sleep?
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Old 12-18-03, 01:13 AM   #13
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hey i recognize this haha.. sounds alot better spit over a beat too.. we need'a lace that shit and throw it up.. ima post mines for the hell of it.. holla
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Old 12-19-03, 04:16 PM   #14
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upppn..............
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Old 12-19-03, 04:28 PM   #15
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dawg i was feelin the shit, good choices of words but get tired of reading the same endings, just switch it up a bit and mix the shit, and you got it, holdem down
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