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Old 12-16-03, 10:32 PM   #1
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Nuclear Concepts.....rap Game

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99113
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99080
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99298

wen i come out how many people will wanna copy?
mayb thousands or million, hundreds probly
u can't stop me im unstopable theres no stoppin me
people will wanna emulate and come out wit another sloppy me
even if i get fucked up and even almost die chances r still slim
even after that im-a do this as a fuckin hobby till then
till when? till death. its such a scary thought
no joy can bring it bak not even a present that u bought
this is a hobby no amount of money can bring bak the joy
i enjoy entertainin i don't fuck i'll do this even if im unemployed
money doesn't mean anything 2 me it ain't y i entertain
that y other peoples do it then they think im insane
i don't entertain for dead prsidents i can kill them on my own
if u piss me u don't wanna do that so just leave me alone
i be controversal non-commercial causin damn infernos
meltin mics in my hand but still u need 2 learn tho
ring ring u need 2 wake up dammit and finally realize
half the people and stuff out there is just spreadin lies
life isn't all about havin a party wit bicardi and lemons
ice jewlery hard liquor with drunk women
or money spendin show respect to women
life ain't all about gin and juice sippin
or careless livin or hater killin it ain't how im livin
album sellin so just quit all ur fuckin yellin
stop it cos dammit i don't care about ur weekend
or wen u bust sum caps in sum weak men
so since ur up all night go to sleep then
or just shut up and sip ur sweet hen
i hope ur listenin cos my mission isn't 2 change ur life
but strike more fear in u than the assholes that crucified christ
wen he ressurected on the 3rd day
let me get 2 my point and get at wut im tryin 2 say
i don't care if u don't listen 2 me cos im not baked wit a "tight" beat
i don't listen 2 radio i don't know wut that is cos underground runs my streets
its how we be naturally commercial pop is nonsense
cos all is sed is how money got spent

not done yet i need sum feedbak and tell me wut needs 2 be wrked on
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Make the hardest thug in your crew tuck in his chane,
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<center><marquee behavior=scroll direction="left"scrollamount="5"><font size="5" color=red>.:NUCLEAR CONCEPTS:.
We are the worlds most dangerous niggas alive,
All of my niggas bang with us and lets ride </marquee></center>
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Old 12-16-03, 10:32 PM   #2
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yo this makes the mind think i like that you delivered clear consiece an kept me glued this was mad ill
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Old 12-16-03, 11:34 PM   #3
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yo i actually liked this piece right here. wasnt sure at first and thought it was gonna be another "im the shit" kinda thing. but the content developed and went off a little into your own personal views and emotions. i like that kinda shit that just flows with your mind. good job.
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Old 12-19-03, 05:05 PM   #4
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thanx for the feedback uppin for some more

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Make the hardest thug in your crew tuck in his chane,
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<center><marquee behavior=scroll direction="left"scrollamount="5"><font size="5" color=red>.:NUCLEAR CONCEPTS:.
We are the worlds most dangerous niggas alive,
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Old 12-19-03, 05:07 PM   #5
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i thought it was a bit ermmm..ok!!
nuttin special coz there wasn't nuttin complex about it
it was a str8 forward rhyming pz...but you did have an aight story
not bad overall..jus keep elevating..
pz
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Old 12-19-03, 05:21 PM   #6
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Yeah this was alright....your structure in this was alright i thought, it could use some touching up though in some spots....your vocab in this was alright i thought, could be up'd a bit though i think...flow in this was ok, it fell off at some points but nothing real big...but overall this was alright...keep at it.
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Old 12-19-03, 06:14 PM   #7
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i liked this...not too complex but not too simple eay on the eyes i think....some nice feeling in ther..yeah not a bad drop inafact good id say...keep reppin...pZ twin
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Old 12-19-03, 06:26 PM   #8
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this was kool
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Old 12-19-03, 10:05 PM   #9
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yo i need some feedback on this peace
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It wont be the same since we touchin the game,
Make the hardest thug in your crew tuck in his chane,
You think this shits a game and im bluffin for fame?
Ill squeeze off this tech till nothin remains

Latest win-Wiggadave 5-0 KO

<center><marquee behavior=scroll direction="left"scrollamount="5"><font size="5" color=red>.:NUCLEAR CONCEPTS:.
We are the worlds most dangerous niggas alive,
All of my niggas bang with us and lets ride </marquee></center>
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