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12-19-03, 12:45 PM | #1 | |||||||
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"Arrows Of Love"
IP: B836 4E64
Arrows Of Love
Chorus: Ah........Arrows of love I...........jus love the rush come.........spread the cheers baby...........don't have no fear I miss you on Valentine's DAY baby I hate because were AWAY come a little CLOSER baby why you so SOBER stop looking so BLUE you know all I want is YOU I like the way you TALK twitchin, skipping, and WALK when you look..... at ME my eyes are fixated on your BODY cupid makes it all POSSIBLE love is never ever STOPPABLE not.....in my EYES because I always TRIED this is my new STYLE I've sung back WHILE since the church DAYS till my voice was RAISED uppity up it GOES smelling sweet like a ROSE blossomin in the FIELD now tell me..... is your love REAL I'm feeling warmness in my HEART love is light thwarting off all DARK I'm always quick to do it RIGHT when I feel the VIBE right............SETTING right............MOOD might be..........LETTING me by...............SOON kiss after KISS lips smacking LIPS never hopes it ENDS being more than jus FRIENDS jus give me a CHANCE let's hit the floor and jus DANCE Valentine's day from yours TRULY my baby, my girl, my lover, my BEAUTY
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*Nashville city* Last edited by ak-mixa : 12-19-03 at 01:20 PM. |
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12-19-03, 12:49 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: B836 4E64
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6454#post996454
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6512#post996512 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...161#post1000161 my three links boyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!! !!my first ever love song I wrote man rate it an tell me!
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12-19-03, 02:31 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
This was ok....but your structure could use some work, try making your lines a bit longer and keep them around the same length though to help out the flow....also try adding some multies to this to make it better....but just keep at it.
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