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Old 12-19-03, 12:45 PM   #1
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"Arrows Of Love"

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Arrows Of Love

Chorus: Ah........Arrows of love
I...........jus love the rush
come.........spread the cheers
baby...........don't have no fear


I miss you on Valentine's DAY
baby I hate because were AWAY
come a little CLOSER
baby why you so SOBER
stop looking so BLUE
you know all I want is YOU
I like the way you TALK
twitchin, skipping, and WALK
when you look..... at ME
my eyes are fixated on your BODY
cupid makes it all POSSIBLE
love is never ever STOPPABLE
not.....in my EYES
because I always TRIED
this is my new STYLE
I've sung back WHILE
since the church DAYS
till my voice was RAISED
uppity up it GOES
smelling sweet like a ROSE
blossomin in the FIELD
now tell me..... is your love REAL
I'm feeling warmness in my HEART
love is light thwarting off all DARK
I'm always quick to do it RIGHT
when I feel the VIBE
right............SETTING
right............MOOD
might be..........LETTING
me by...............SOON
kiss after KISS
lips smacking LIPS
never hopes it ENDS
being more than jus FRIENDS
jus give me a CHANCE
let's hit the floor and jus DANCE
Valentine's day from yours TRULY
my baby, my girl, my lover, my BEAUTY
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Old 12-19-03, 12:49 PM   #2
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Old 12-19-03, 02:31 PM   #3
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This was ok....but your structure could use some work, try making your lines a bit longer and keep them around the same length though to help out the flow....also try adding some multies to this to make it better....but just keep at it.
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