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Old 12-19-03, 12:48 PM   #1
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Viscosity Part 1 diss

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Young Nyce
Young Smiff
Deva

Yo nyte i got a dope job for ya, you can be my informent//
And tell me when Viscosity can look at internet porn yet//
Vio ya dick's not for michael so try to keep it in ya pants//
you'll never be on his desktop doin the diaper baby dance//
I said fuck god and got mighty mouse all hyped up again//
Ya need to calm down and stop poppin ya midol and ya vicadin//
When im through with u chump ill be the last man standing//
And you'll be on ya way to your Olympic Band Camp Crowning//
He's tryed rapin the head priests' daughter untill he found..//
that she was a manikin he still bought her then ran//
Oh hell ya im finaly going to be a man again he yelled in tha hall//
then said hold on bitch while i get moms fake sack and//
dads rubber balls ill lather them up with vapor halls//
Vio stills takin his chances crackin jokes at whites//
he's really gonna piss himself when along comes vanilla ice//

somethin tossed together i was gonna use but it doesnt hit hard enough
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Old 12-19-03, 12:51 PM   #2
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thought ya structure was aight...but the flow fell in places....try and keep it going with internals.....brings it together better....but for the most this was decent...we all need work in some way so...yeah keep elevatin...pZ brov
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Old 12-19-03, 01:03 PM   #3
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This was okay. I've seen better of your shit. For putting it together in a quick minute, it was good.
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Old 12-19-03, 01:13 PM   #4
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ok even tho it was against me ill critque it
The flow was choppy
There was a few ok punches
structure was ight

7.5/10 keep spittin
if you want ill set up a battle?
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Old 12-19-03, 01:15 PM   #5
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iight man give me time to spit tho iight
send tha thread to me in a pm or ill jst find it in frontlines......
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Old 12-19-03, 01:20 PM   #6
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honestly dropz this wasnt very good you didnt hit your opponent very well your punches were clouded in fillers and ive read VIS work if you want to battle him you need to step the game up a little bit focus on attacking him relating to him and embarassing him. you didnt do bad but i dont see you beating him unless you improve this.
relate to an emmotion that brings anger then attack.
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Old 12-19-03, 01:29 PM   #7
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thanx fo tha feedback

yo word~perfect your advice much appreciated
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Old 12-19-03, 02:08 PM   #8
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Old 12-19-03, 02:25 PM   #9
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..Let's get ready to Rumble!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Old 12-19-03, 02:40 PM   #10
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I wasn't felelin it dawg, a lil of it maybe but all in all Vis gonna get you Dawg
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Old 12-23-03, 12:10 AM   #11
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Man....Cracka...do the whole Rap Battle community a favor and shoot yourself...you wouldn't no rap from a techno song, the only, and Viscosity your a little fuckin bitch....someone votes against you and its automatically dick ridin or hatin..man SHUT TEH FUCK UP and take it like a man....your mom did...why cant you be more like her?(WOOOOAAAH The mom jokes)
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Old 12-23-03, 01:20 AM   #12
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needs work, longer, better bars,better rhymes.
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Old 12-23-03, 11:55 AM   #13
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iight it was good 2 me vocab can use work like mine
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Old 12-23-03, 11:56 AM   #14
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it was good, keep workin dropz and you'll b ^ at da top of this site, but work is a key word
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Old 12-23-03, 01:22 PM   #15
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yo se7en stop freeposting yo lil bitch
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