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01-06-04, 03:54 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Abercrombie & Bitch
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Abercrombie & Bitch
Face all painted up like a little Barbie doll Clothes fitted perfectly, skirt short, boots tall Shimmery blonde hair, brushed to shine But behind green eyes she hides pain over time As she strides by, her expensive perfume lingers The world is at the tip of her manicured fingers Isn't she lucky? She's the hottest for sure But on the inside she just can't smile to allure She's got fame, fortune, boys and fast cars Everyone loves her, but she's hiding scars She can barely go out without making a scene She's tired of her face on every magazine But has this angel really earned her wings? She IS NOT perfection, she's done bad things This so called "superstar" hasn't earned her own All she does is bitch to the Rolling Stone What exactly does she have to complain about? That Luis Vuttion purse she simply couldn't live without? She has never seen failure, she always gets her way I would like to see her last on the street for a day She acts like the whole world shouldn't know her business Stop parading around in your underwear, princess! I guess money cannot buy happiness, which is an unscratchable itch She isn't so innocent, she's been exposed as a bitch |
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01-06-04, 04:05 PM | #2 | |||||||
..Soft Focus..
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IP: 1B3B C284
This Was A Good Piece, I Really Enjoyed The First Four Stanzas Over The Last One Because You Had A Good Sence Of Style In The Emotion Along With Creativity In A Simple Rhyme. It Was Amusing To Kind Of Listen To A Story Told About Behind The Scene Emotions Of A Star. Very Neat. Well Done.
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01-06-04, 05:21 PM | #3 | |||||||
one wink
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IP: AAF1 A3DB
^She's My girlfriend, she's exempt, .
I loved the sheer sarcasm of the title itself, and then the whole poem, you touch my heart, in sooooo many ways. Hmm, maybe that's why I love you? |
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01-06-04, 08:10 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 1B81 17C4
Lots of emotion in this
i liked it the flow was nice nice drop EDIT: Sorry, but no more than two pieces allowed on front page at one time. Read rules about how to re-open this piece at later date. Patience.. *cowers into corner, wary of Bruklor's incurring wrath..*... Last edited by varentao : 01-11-04 at 01:56 PM. |
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