Makeveli Trained vs convicted
 

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10 lines
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due in 24 hours
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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 02-14-05 at 06:44 PM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

Makeveli Trained has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-13-05 06:46 PM.

damn, i set this up wrong, i meant to have it due in 24 hours, can some1 fix or delete this?
thanx

convicted has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-13-05 07:05 PM.

Aight Listen Ta Wat I Gotta Say
This Aint No Beef Or A Fight Cuz You Would Never Win Any Way ........your Lyrics Dont Make Sence
Another Fake Hustler From Tha Past Tence

Man Dont Make Me Trip
You Just Another Fuckin Fan With A Loose Ass Grip
Cock Suckin Basket Case Momas Boy Still Suckin On Momas Tit..wat Ya Think I Couldent Tell Ya I Was Razed In Jail But I Just Got Paroll Now Im Out On Bail
You Muthafucker S Will Never Catch Me Cuz Im To Fast For You To Bitch Ass Im A Watch You Rot In Hell
I'll Be Back .......yep For You An Ya Motha Fuckin Girfriend Too......theres No Tellin Wat Ill Do This Mabey Your Last Chance Ta Say Anything Cuz You Just
Got Screwed.................

I'll post jus in case i cant get this battle re-set up

Turn ya average drops 2 breakfast, u aint winning w/ ya played ass lines
I’ll collapse his whole spine cuz Notice just a miner threat like a lack of Coal Sites
When it's trouble he runs n brags about skills he hasn't harnessed yet
So I told em ta Eat His Heart Out n tha bitch quickly Starved 2 Death
You'll get tossed regardless, I promise, even if u drop ur hardest
Honestly, I'll still set this Herbicide (herb aside) like cautious Farmers
Been close to a year n ya games still wack, ya girls jus ya buddy dude
Cuz tha closest ya came to havin a Date with her wuz in ya Study Group
Your a bitch, n i swear ill expose u worse than the Clinton affair
Cuz ya punches cant even be called Misses, they not even Hittin the Air

2nd lines supposed to say, ...."cuz Notice hes just a miner threat........."
newayz u get the point

This was feedback posted for Makeveli Trained
 

checkin' the polls.

good job gentlemen.

(m.t.) nice shit crhymie....but you got this one, honestly. continue to hold it down like a boss. keep up the good shit. oner...


s.v.

uppin les get some votes

Voted For: Makeveli Trained

Makaveli trained this cat, gotta give it to him.... eat his heart out - starved 2 death was hot. HERBICIDE IS A HOT LINE. Study group too... lots of punches hit mad hard... Convicted's throwin jabs, Mak threw some haymakers.

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damn, im startin to think i wasted some of those lines on this herb...........too late though, and thanx for the vote

damn........r u serious, still no more votes
uppp

Voted For: Makeveli Trained

yo dis was a wack battle on da real...vote goes to makeveli cuz he had betta structure and harda punches...convicted ya whole drop was stretched and flow was ordinary so thats what cost you my vote...no need for further explanation on battles like these...~1~

-Prolifik

v/Makeveli Trained

Voted For: Makeveli Trained

let me break it down

Aight Listen Ta Wat I Gotta Say
This Aint No Beef Or A Fight Cuz You Would Never Win Any Way ........your Lyrics Dont Make Sence
Another Fake Hustler From Tha Past Tence
{weak opener fam, there was no punch or wordplay or personal here, work on your opener for real}

Man Dont Make Me Trip
You Just Another Fuckin Fan With A Loose Ass Grip
{nothing here either too}
Cock Suckin Basket Case Momas Boy Still Suckin On Momas Tit..wat Ya Think I Couldent Tell Ya I Was Razed In Jail But I Just Got Paroll Now Im Out On Bail
{this aint a punch this is self glorifaction and i wouldnt glorif about this}
You Muthafucker S Will Never Catch Me Cuz Im To Fast For You To Bitch Ass Im A Watch You Rot In Hell
I'll Be Back .......yep For You An Ya Motha Fuckin Girfriend Too......theres No Tellin Wat Ill Do This Mabey Your Last Chance Ta Say Anything Cuz You Just
Got Screwed.................
{had no punches nor nothing at all for me to give you my vote}work on that stuff, read some battles and youll get in to it


Turn ya average drops 2 breakfast, u aint winning w/ ya played ass lines
I’ll collapse his whole spine cuz Notice just a miner threat like a lack of Coal Sites
{bad opener, didnt even rhyme, i saw where you were giong but you aint get there}
When it's trouble he runs n brags about skills he hasn't harnessed yet
So I told em ta Eat His Heart Out n tha bitch quickly Starved 2 Death
{ehh you tried with it i saw where you were giong}
You'll get tossed regardless, I promise, even if u drop ur hardest
Honestly, I'll still set this Herbicide (herb aside) like cautious Farmers
{only punch that made it in this battle but it was still weak}
Been close to a year n ya games still wack, ya girls jus ya buddy dude
Cuz tha closest ya came to havin a Date with her wuz in ya Study Group
{haha but this was a terrible punch but it made me smirk}
Your a bitch, n i swear ill expose u worse than the Clinton affair
Cuz ya punches cant even be called Misses, they not even Hittin the Air
{played as hell bro but you get my vote cuz this and the other one is the only two punches in the battle}

get at the battle in my sig............................................... ...........

damn, dropped a half ass verse in like 10 minutes n im still gonna win, pffftttt

Voted For: Makeveli Trained

Makeveli Trained takes this one

Turn ya average drops 2 breakfast, u aint winning w/ ya played ass lines
I’ll collapse his whole spine cuz Notice just a miner threat like a lack of Coal Sites
wORDPLAY GOOD PUNCH WAS GOOD SET UP WAS DECENT
GOOD OPENER OVERALL
When it's trouble he runs n brags about skills he hasn't harnessed yet
So I told em ta Eat His Heart Out n tha bitch quickly Starved 2 Death
SET UP WAS DECENT AND THE PUNCH WAS GOOD
You'll get tossed regardless, I promise, even if u drop ur hardest
Honestly, I'll still set this Herbicide (herb aside) like cautious Farmers
SET UP NOTHIN SPECIAL BUT ONCE AGAIN THE PUNCH GOOD
Been close to a year n ya games still wack, ya girls jus ya buddy dude
Cuz tha closest ya came to havin a Date with her wuz in ya Study Group
BAD LINE WASN'T FEELIN SET UP OR PUNCH
Your a bitch, n i swear ill expose u worse than the Clinton affair
Cuz ya punches cant even be called Misses, they not even Hittin the Air
SET UP AND PUNCH GOOD GOOD CLOSER
consistently good punches, lacked structure though but it flo'd and if you fix the structure it'll be raw

Aight Listen Ta Wat I Gotta Say
This Aint No Beef Or A Fight Cuz You Would Never Win Any Way ........your
BAD LINE, SET UP AND PUNCH WERE BOTH WEAK
Lyrics Dont Make Sence
Another Fake Hustler From Tha Past Tence
ANOTHER BAD LINE SET UP AND PUNCH WERE WEAK

FROM HERE I'M JUST GUESSING WHAT THE STRUCTURE WAS

Man Dont Make Me Trip
You Just Another Fuckin Fan With A Loose Ass Grip
Cock Suckin Basket Case Momas Boy Still Suckin On Momas Tit
SET UP WAS WEAK PUNCHES WERE WEAK
wat Ya Think I Couldent Tell Ya I Was Razed In Jail
But I Just Got Paroll Now Im Out On Bail
You Muthafucker S Will Never Catch Me Cuz Im To Fast For You To Bitch Ass Im A Watch You Rot In Hell
SET UP WAS DECENT I GUESS NO PUNCH THOUGH THEN WEAK
I'll Be Back .......yep For You An Ya Motha Fuckin Girfriend Too
theres No Tellin Wat Ill Do
This Mabey Your Last Chance Ta Say Anything Cuz You Just
Got Screwed.................
WEAK SET UP AND WEAK PUNCH BAD CLOSER

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uppin, one more vote

^^^UPPIN' FOR THE CRHYMIE MAK!!! lets get these votes in people.


...the super...........c.s.

uppin kids one more vote

Voted For: Makeveli Trained

this was an 1-sided battle the whole way out:
opener: m.t.
vocab: m.t.
structure: m.t.
multis: m.t.
closer: m.t.
m.t. wins my vote cuz he had the betta vocab in this battle; but both of y'all need 2 elevate in ur rhymes & work on ur wordplay; convicted u don't need 2 stretch ur lines
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