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Dark Matter
What’s beyond those stars? Is there someone like me droppin’ bars? Wonderin’ that same somethin, deep beyond Mars? What’s the chance?Would their intelligence be as strong as ours? Maybe they exist but messages take eons to pass By the time Everest is grains of dirt They catch the A-team interspersed with adverts Products of our endangered earth Or perhaps existence lurks and they’ve yet to search Their form is at the beginnin Simple organisms who’s form is hidden Who can guess the storms they’ve ridden Maybe the weather system has 7 suns that are always risen? And a blue moon occurs often as earth sends people to prison Are the inhabitants cohesive or is there division? Do they see every single colour of a prism? Have x-ray vision, or even have eyes? Is there good and evil amongst the people where they reside? Did stars radiation mutate them into horrors to despise? Am I before the times? Parallel universes?In light years do I wipe tears When my bodies are in hearses seein my own demise? Gravity is reversed and rain rises from the skies Oceans are so strong they move the moon, it not the tides Or, blackholes swallowed them whole?A vacuum satan Maybe UFO’s rose blastin other civilisations, into simile raisins They visited here killed the roar of dinosaurs then abandoned nation Or made pyramids, founded villages livin on secretly as Masons We’re all aliens and this is just one of many stations Religion was invented to stop the population questioning creations But fossils made it possible to see the ancients The last of a dying breed, dodo of the galaxy Any survival rests in Kyoto to save life and humanity Maybe it’s a sick joke and freedoms a fallacy That’s why you make millions and sniff coke, it’s virtual reality While some children stitch clothes in a sweatshop to question morality I’m nothin but a Sim in a moment of clarity A magnets turned off and we fall from grace in zero gravity Gallant space cadets played like cassettes in a tape deck Drifting forever as small as atoms in spaces cavity We’re morons, they have more on in terms of brain capacity Part of a giant celestial body? Just a skin cell tattooed from an inkwell, could we understand this? The suns the heart, I’m simply a part of larger planets Russian doll syndrome, in grown, so minuscule as good as vanished Or a billion billionth to one jackpot on cosmic bandits Gods spare change hittin paydirt and he made earth Now you’re reading these words from a pen I brandished Millions of years of evolution direct to your bandwidth Shoulda told you to begin with you need food for thought So go grab a sandwich Reducin thinking to whys, what on earths and how can this…? Deceptive opticals?Killing cats with curiosity trying to imagine how this is possible The probabilities are astronomical Maybe life resided widely and each one of us is an oracle Nothing is rhetorical, we answer questions within lessons With every passing second we intensify focus We’re osmosis in a cosmos Don’t know if, that’s a stab in the dark or a prognosis Homo sapien, would a planet of the apes be the closest, to hearin from apes like men?? But whatever we discover in humans endeavour I hope we never taste the end I sit back and marvel at every single particle and wonder how long the race will spend Waging war on each other, but until then I am a ripple on a water molecule, hopin my pen is laced with Zen Living, breathing, never leaving, maybe I’m just a human being Sight seeing Interacting in Darwin’s living museum |
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nice fam...very deep piece you got here, well put togeather, on a
Philosophical tip fused with abstract metaphors and dope word choice, i note you concentrate a lot on end rhyme, id like to see a little more internals...though thats minor cause i think your style is pretty solid, couple of spelling errors...again minor but it stopped me reading so you should fix those.... Quote:
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and i think the qustions yo posed in different sections was the outstanding part of your script...like i said some deep shit in there...i laughed at the whole alien conspiracy theories part, yes i seen that shit too, the pyramids shit...overall just a dope drop...keep that shit up...peace |
lyrics decent, concept decent, creativity decent, set up was good, structure was good, iit stayed on point through out the piece.. keep up
6/10 |
appreciate the feed guys
and Greviss, cheers for pointin out the spelling mistake, fixed that the other 'mistake' you pointed out isn't a mistake out! |
It was iight, u put effort, I like that.
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it was ok i give it a 6.8cause it was ok it wasnt all that good,almost but not a 7
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damn homie i gotta $ay i'm likin thi$ piece u put forth alot of effort ...at no point & time did it $ound forced ...everythang flowed $moothly ....yea it'z deep it touched on alot of $ubject$ mo$t that even give it a thought or even knew about
i liked it all especially tha part on alien theories & tha pyramid joint keep up tha good work 9.5/10 |
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rofl with the '6.8' crap it's not a fucking diving competition learn whats good before you criticise |
this shit aint good,its just deep
this shit bored me in the first 2 lines if you think your better i have no problem battling you |
rofl at this kid^
it's iller than anything you'll ever write as for a battle, i wouldn't waste my time cos for you i'd only need to recycle some played shit from 2003 to beat you |
^^^ya'll should battle...bring this site some life and battle plz
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its whateva..you already know what it is,im down to battle but this nigga is acting like a whore....shit its whateva
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Yeah, this was straight up WACK, nah'msayen?
The boy Wiley D is right, and Efgeesus ALWAYS be ducking battles because he's wack as FUCK! Or $hould I use the dollar $ign over each of my S's? Hmmm .. Tough call. I'll have to think about that one. |
its nice to see an emcee.. thats just it
fav. bar "We’re all aliens and this is just one of many stations Religion was invented to stop the population questioning creations" and "Gallant space cadets played like cassettes in a tape deck" but u didnt rhyme it wit nuthin.. good wordplay tho.. i need to work on that nice concept, flow was kinda off but the bars made sense so u got away with that.. lol 5 1/2 | 10 needed more spunk in it tho.. as for efgeesus and wiley d.. never seen a battle between two emcees wit such funny names.. hard to wonder wat the battle'd b like.. lol peace |
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