RapVerse.com Community
 Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End RV Radio  

Go Back   RapVerse.com Community > Fresh From The Lab > Textual Releases
User Name
Password
FAQ Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Reply
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread Display Modes
Old 01-20-07, 12:16 PM   #1
efgeesus
New to RV
 
Posts: 14
Joined: Jan 2007
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
Dark Matter

IP: ED94 FF0C

What’s beyond those stars?
Is there someone like me droppin’ bars?
Wonderin’ that same somethin, deep beyond Mars?
What’s the chance?Would their intelligence be as strong as ours?
Maybe they exist but messages take eons to pass
By the time Everest is grains of dirt
They catch the A-team interspersed with adverts
Products of our endangered earth
Or perhaps existence lurks and they’ve yet to search
Their form is at the beginnin
Simple organisms who’s form is hidden
Who can guess the storms they’ve ridden
Maybe the weather system has 7 suns that are always risen?
And a blue moon occurs often as earth sends people to prison
Are the inhabitants cohesive or is there division?
Do they see every single colour of a prism?
Have x-ray vision, or even have eyes?
Is there good and evil amongst the people where they reside?
Did stars radiation mutate them into horrors to despise?
Am I before the times?
Parallel universes?In light years do I wipe tears
When my bodies are in hearses seein my own demise?
Gravity is reversed and rain rises from the skies
Oceans are so strong they move the moon, it not the tides
Or, blackholes swallowed them whole?A vacuum satan
Maybe UFO’s rose blastin other civilisations, into simile raisins
They visited here killed the roar of dinosaurs then abandoned nation
Or made pyramids, founded villages livin on secretly as Masons
We’re all aliens and this is just one of many stations
Religion was invented to stop the population questioning creations
But fossils made it possible to see the ancients
The last of a dying breed, dodo of the galaxy
Any survival rests in Kyoto to save life and humanity
Maybe it’s a sick joke and freedoms a fallacy
That’s why you make millions and sniff coke, it’s virtual reality
While some children stitch clothes in a sweatshop to question morality
I’m nothin but a Sim in a moment of clarity
A magnets turned off and we fall from grace in zero gravity
Gallant space cadets played like cassettes in a tape deck
Drifting forever as small as atoms in spaces cavity
We’re morons, they have more on in terms of brain capacity
Part of a giant celestial body?
Just a skin cell tattooed from an inkwell, could we understand this?
The suns the heart, I’m simply a part of larger planets
Russian doll syndrome, in grown, so minuscule as good as vanished
Or a billion billionth to one jackpot on cosmic bandits
Gods spare change hittin paydirt and he made earth
Now you’re reading these words from a pen I brandished
Millions of years of evolution direct to your bandwidth
Shoulda told you to begin with you need food for thought
So go grab a sandwich
Reducin thinking to whys, what on earths and how can this…?
Deceptive opticals?Killing cats with curiosity trying to imagine how this is possible
The probabilities are astronomical
Maybe life resided widely and each one of us is an oracle
Nothing is rhetorical, we answer questions within lessons
With every passing second we intensify focus
We’re osmosis in a cosmos
Don’t know if, that’s a stab in the dark or a prognosis
Homo sapien, would a planet of the apes be the closest, to hearin from apes like men??
But whatever we discover in humans endeavour I hope we never taste the end
I sit back and marvel at every single particle and wonder how long the race will spend
Waging war on each other, but until then
I am a ripple on a water molecule, hopin my pen is laced with Zen
Living, breathing, never leaving, maybe I’m just a human being
Sight seeing
Interacting in Darwin’s living museum

Last edited by efgeesus : 01-21-07 at 08:18 AM.
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-20-07, 12:28 PM   #2
efgeesus
New to RV
 
Posts: 14
Joined: Jan 2007
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: ED94 FF0C

  Reply With Quote
Old 01-20-07, 09:12 PM   #3
GREVISS
Flyweight
 
Posts: 112
Joined: Jul 2006
Status: Offline
IP: B4FF 1C13

nice fam...very deep piece you got here, well put togeather, on a
Philosophical tip fused with abstract metaphors and dope word choice,
i note you concentrate a lot on end rhyme, id like to see a little more
internals...though thats minor cause i think your style is pretty solid,
couple of spelling errors...again minor but it stopped me reading
so you should fix those....


Quote:
Wonderin’ that same somethin, deep beyong Mars?

Quote:
Oceans are so strong they move the moon, it not the tides



this was my fav passage
Quote:
That’s why you make millions and sniff coke, it’s virtual reality
While some children stitch clothes in a sweatshop to question morality
I’m nothin but a Sim in a moment of clarity
A magnets turned off and we fall from grace in zero gravity
Gallant space cadets played like cassettes in a tape deck
Drifting forever as small as atoms in spaces cavity


and i think the qustions yo posed in different sections was the
outstanding part of your script...like i said some deep shit in
there...i laughed at the whole alien conspiracy theories part,
yes i seen that shit too, the pyramids shit...overall just a
dope drop...keep that shit up...peace
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-21-07, 03:41 AM   #4
Cannabarz™
New to RV
 
Cannabarz™'s Avatar
 
Posts: 62
Joined: Nov 2005
From: Brooklyn, NY
Status: Offline
Text Record: 1-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 68E9 5207

lyrics decent, concept decent, creativity decent, set up was good, structure was good, iit stayed on point through out the piece.. keep up

6/10
__________________

i've Been RiPPin VetZ 4'r 4 yrz .. Don't B NeXt!

EsCaPed CaNNiBaLisM EmCeE..since 02'
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-21-07, 08:20 AM   #5
efgeesus
New to RV
 
Posts: 14
Joined: Jan 2007
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 25BD 3D2F

appreciate the feed guys

and Greviss, cheers for pointin out the spelling mistake, fixed that

the other 'mistake' you pointed out isn't a mistake

out!
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-21-07, 02:31 PM   #6
Valiant
Human Crack in The Flesh.
 
Valiant's Avatar
 
Posts: 840
Joined: Mar 2005
From: Tower City
Status: Offline
Text Record: 11-3
IP: CB7D 43AB

It was iight, u put effort, I like that.
__________________
Try Out Here

Join The Dynasty Today




----

THE 300 DYNASTY



  Reply With Quote
Old 01-21-07, 09:45 PM   #7
wiley d
New Jack
 
Posts: 256
Joined: Jul 2006
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 63F2 4834

it was ok i give it a 6.8cause it was ok it wasnt all that good,almost but not a 7
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-22-07, 08:28 AM   #8
D~Tox tha Legend
New to RV
 
Posts: 18
Joined: Jan 2007
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 8A05 210E

damn homie i gotta $ay i'm likin thi$ piece u put forth alot of effort ...at no point & time did it $ound forced ...everythang flowed $moothly ....yea it'z deep it touched on alot of $ubject$ mo$t that even give it a thought or even knew about

i liked it all especially tha part on alien theories & tha pyramid joint keep up tha good work 9.5/10
__________________
What'z Really H60d??

Ea$t$ide Rollin 60 NHC
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-22-07, 08:46 AM   #9
efgeesus
New to RV
 
Posts: 14
Joined: Jan 2007
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: E45B F83E

Quote:
Originally Posted by wiley d
it was ok i give it a 6.8cause it was ok it wasnt all that good,almost but not a 7



rofl with the '6.8' crap

it's not a fucking diving competition

learn whats good before you criticise
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-22-07, 10:17 AM   #10
wiley d
New Jack
 
Posts: 256
Joined: Jul 2006
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 7EAF 257F

this shit aint good,its just deep
this shit bored me in the first 2 lines

if you think your better i have no problem battling you
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-22-07, 03:29 PM   #11
efgeesus
New to RV
 
Posts: 14
Joined: Jan 2007
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: E45B F83E

rofl at this kid^

it's iller than anything you'll ever write

as for a battle, i wouldn't waste my time
cos for you i'd only need to recycle some played shit from 2003 to beat you
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-22-07, 04:45 PM   #12
Dufflebag Boy
why so serious!!??
 
Dufflebag Boy's Avatar
 
Posts: 2,059
Joined: Sep 2006
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 2020 96DE

^^^ya'll should battle...bring this site some life and battle plz
__________________
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-23-07, 02:36 PM   #13
wiley d
New Jack
 
Posts: 256
Joined: Jul 2006
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: B842 FA56

its whateva..you already know what it is,im down to battle but this nigga is acting like a whore....shit its whateva
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-27-07, 10:15 AM   #14
Baron, Bitch!
New to RV
 
Baron, Bitch!'s Avatar
 
Posts: 27
Joined: Oct 2006
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 6E7E BC73

Yeah, this was straight up WACK, nah'msayen?
The boy Wiley D is right, and Efgeesus ALWAYS be ducking battles because he's wack as FUCK!

Or $hould I use the dollar $ign over each of my S's?
Hmmm ..

Tough call.
I'll have to think about that one.
__________________
Act like you know.

"I had to get off the boat, so I could walk on water" - Jay-Z
Send a message via MSN to Baron, Bitch! Send a message via Yahoo to Baron, Bitch!   Reply With Quote
Old 01-27-07, 11:37 AM   #15
Gen-o-Tonik
New to RV
 
Gen-o-Tonik's Avatar
 
Posts: 17
Joined: Jan 2007
From: Chi Town
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 2630 42B1

its nice to see an emcee.. thats just it

fav. bar

"We’re all aliens and this is just one of many stations
Religion was invented to stop the population questioning creations"

and


"Gallant space cadets played like cassettes in a tape deck"

but u didnt rhyme it wit nuthin.. good wordplay tho.. i need to work on that


nice concept, flow was kinda off but the bars made sense so u got away with that.. lol

5 1/2 | 10

needed more spunk in it tho..

as for efgeesus and wiley d.. never seen a battle between two emcees wit such funny names.. hard to wonder wat the battle'd b like.. lol

peace
__________________
y hate, wen, u can just get like me?.. y wait wen u can just get like me, quik? shyt, i can just spit nice heat on that's colder then trips I skii on. my treat

Official King of the Cypher.. Who wants to prove me wrong??

Send a message via Yahoo to Gen-o-Tonik   Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 09:02 AM.

Powered by vBulletin.
Copyright © 2000-2004 Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.