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Times Have Changed,
understand the metas n wordplay
. . Times Have Changed we first met at 14, remember that day i thought i lost my hat, i wore my heart on my sleeve as i gave you the shirt off my back, you deserved that, first girl i met that had it for real, not just your look, its a fact you could make the worst dogs heal, at first i was cautious, im not to sure if you saw this, see, U were the principal of my thoughts when i sat in the office, fights..? i should've dropped it, but things were fragile, a breakup..? yea, i hated having to crack a smile, . im in denial, travelin to a new place n told im envied.!!? why'd they send me, hell, i should've traded my seat with empty.. it was tempting, thinking their must've been some way, but hey dismay got the better of me that day, .....................................actually it decided to stay, . 16 months 7 days n some change, are things the same? im feelin lost with names, guess times cost is eventually claimed, i even refrained from old impulses when i first seen you, thinking that distance is irrelevent, it seemed i was too, austin who'? Oh you, Mister "did'nt call" "did'nt write", im not back a day, shes fittin gloves, either to walk out or fight? aight, not sure of your tone, i stood stunned n hurt, think'n events must be repeatin themselves, n i forgot to go first, our speech was dirt, literally trash talking, spewing about vibes, here i thought things were cool, but it was minus 32 outside, i tried, but my speech was kept at bay, i was tounge tide, n during the ride, it was dead silence.. it seemed sound died, but you cried in anger at having to treat me like a stranger, but whats stranger is that you cried outta your anger. now im not gonna claim that h,ours were perfect, but at times i felt the cost was well worth it, . . it was crazy, you were always there keepin me from harm, n you'd swear i was made of money the way you'd tug on my arm, . but it was'nt like that, cash was the last thing on our minds, we were more worried about having a good time, through all the fights, cursing n highlights it was nice, cuz we knew we'd be together for the rest of our lives, roll the dice, thats basically what i did twice..... . . wait hold the mic (phone call) . . im back thinkin of finishin this rap or cap a gun...! cuz we finally got our lives on track.. ...................but you just lost your life on one... . . "BANG" |
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Look I rap meaner getting slapped in the arena of rap
Look fool perhaps you worry lame hurricane Katrina zapped Structures and cultures in a few hours now that’s a disaster So put your self on a mission to learn definitions and master Rap, look my very bling is hanging but why say everything’s Changing? Them whack Ebonics always impact on economics chut-ching Like RALLY HAMBURGER, dang rap game not rearranging Its in systematic order it twist and slaughter cats leave em dangling On strong microphone ropes with unknown hopes and busted CD’S Player, you say cats scull is dull brain corny game horny like MVP’S It’s a local mystery how you say their local history proves They talk shit deal with love and anger, thug stranger grooves Moves to crime end up locked in jail with a hot bale trailing In life failing and much strife prevailing so really you’re nailing This down homey |
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wtf are you babblin about...?...stay outta my thread... . thanx for the feedback yo, uppin...... |
man glad bag shut the fuck up you fucking peace of wack ass none talent you fucking ignorant peice of shit that still dont understand to not post text's in other people open mics you fucking trash......anyway Daz, this open mic was really, loved the word play, you had some very good multis, atleas you didnt thraugh a bunh of rhyming words in the same line, liked the story alot, nice emotions and all, flow was cool too, overall dope track man
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again, daz does daz.
Nothing to say bad abotu this drop. Yoru emotion is solid,multis are good. and wordplay is well the word play is simply daz. our speech was dirt, literally trash talking, spewing about vibes, here i thought things were cool, but it was minus 32 outside, ^ this stood out for me, aswell as alot of other solid bars, but i feel this is one of the more efeective thru out. Glad to see you still got the touch after a few weeks of not dropping, lets hope ya battlings still up to scratch..lolol |
lol,.^^^werd speats, good lookin on the feedback
. . daz does daz?....lol,...ok, thanx fam... ill be sure to prove your hopes right.. |
really feeling this one, just because it had a cool message, with alot of twists incorporated into the storyline....it was really neat to read, the overall outlook was orignal and provacative
^^^^^^^ - which i enjoy the most out of reading pieces on here, and this concept was beyond original, it was unique :love: well done, here's my fav lines; it was a little section which stood out, in my eyes: aight, not sure of your tone, i stood stunned n hurt, think'n events must be repeatin themselves, n i forgot to go first, our speech was dirt, literally trash talking, spewing about vibes, here i thought things were cool, but it was minus 32 outside, i tried, but my speech was kept at bay, i was tounge tide, n during the ride, it was dead silence.. it seemed sound died, but you cried in anger at having to treat me like a stranger, but whats stranger is that you cried outta your anger. now im not gonna claim that h,ours were perfect, but at times i felt the cost was well worth it, opener was sweet too, keep up man |
uppin this for cats to feed n hopefully learn a thing or two
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i thought the whole thing was crazy i just like how it all whent toghether and how you led us in the story and through the story
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I'm really hopin this is the Daz I know... if so... word...
piece was dope... nice imagery... do this in audio... I'll even make the beat for it... |
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actually its prolly not,(not the rb daz)but thanx for the feed anyhow man.. :thumbup: |
im the RB Daz. whya int u change ya name yet?
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Word Man Good Piece Here Emotion Came Strong Multi's Rhyme Scheme All Nice Count Was Decent, Structure Good Nice Piece.
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