Redemption
 

I'm drunk right now, so I'ma see how this works.

Verse 1
I'm drunk, my speech is slurrin', vision blurrin'/
Swervin' the Suburban, 'bout to crash up on the curb and/
Then I'ma bail out, prolly fall on my ass/
Need a hard awakening, hope I don't fall in the grass/
'Cuz if I'm not on feet I better feel concrete/
Under my seat, 'cuz the alcoholism is now beyond me/
It makes me feel good but inside it hurts/
Sometimes I wish I got caught stealin' out my mother's purse/
I'm a chronic drinker, chronic smoker, smokin' chronic/
My daily water breaks consist of a gin and tonic/
But honest, I'm feindin' for liquor/
Beer, vodka, whiskey, whatever'll fuck me up quicker/
This shit's made me bitter, you don't see my old smile/
A true Cubs fan, that's why I always stock up on Old Style/
It's so wild, livin' in the fast lane/
Hope I crash or get pulled over and god tickets my ass, mane(man)/

Uppin' for feedback, gimme what you got. Vote for my battle in front lines against avanish. Peace

coo nigga right now im giving feed back so check ma shit
peace

Uppin' for more feedback.

damn! thats all I can fuckin say right now! Damn! flowed perfectly, nice vocab, and an overall excellent drop homeboy!! 9/10 beautiful

haha thanks a lot man, 'preciate it. anybody else got some opinions i'm still uppin' for feedback. holla at ya boy.

Uppin'...Gimme some opinions on this or check my other posts:
Inevitable
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hey man, nice drop...had a good flow

Thanks, still uppin' for feedback folks, hit me up.

good i see u got sum skillz holla back n hit my shit up-neva new it would turn dis way-new shit wit me n emerginmc07 holla back peace nice drop again holla

Thanks bro, uppin'...

was good...bein drunk u are good wit typin...i kno i cant type for shit wen i am drunk...haha...my only sugestion is try not to end a line wit and...to me it would be difficult to spit a verse that ended wit and...other than that...good shit...