Look I’m into this bling thing so I see ices with devices
 

Look I’m into this bling thing so I see ices with devices
That shines like the sun funny how they design some, a cri-sis
If a thug lose his jewels like JAROO did, feel small like mice is
See mean between lines and spit obscene rhymes for the public
Like candidates in debates over economy but politics is the subject
Got a love it being a thug legit
On my status the crowd stay at us need apparatus such as
Microphones and CD’S, in towns Roams as VIP’S playing jazz
Be strong in flow and ski on snow like the ice capade in
A nice parade during the Olympic wants the gold when I win

hey uo wanna topicial battle me? ill set it up

^- lol @ Thats Kat For Asking To Battleing In This Kids Open Mic.. haha.. Anyway... Flowed Good, Structure Was Ok, Concept Was Played, You Should Rhyme About Things People Dont Often Talk About, Like Current Events, Or Shit That You Gotta Get Of Ya Chest, Cuz Everbody Rappin Talking Bout Ice' Cars' N Shit When They Got A Plated Gold Chain And Some Broke Down Whip... So Be Original Cuz You Flow Decently In Some Parts.. Peace.. Hit Up My Key'

thanks for the props for real yall

That was alright I give it a 6.5/10
Hey could you check my Open Mic
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=139480

6/10 not bad nice flow

thanks to everyone for props and critique