Intermental - Pain (true shit)
 

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"PAIN"...

this some real true shit man..holla at me...please feed and lsiten to all three verses itll mean alot to me...

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"PAIN"

HOLLA ATCHA BOI

Checkin

Beats Dope

Lyrics Are Deep

Emotions Good

Delivery's Dope

Presence Nice

2nd Verse lyrics Are Real Deep

Same As Above BUt Deeper Lyrics

Im Surprised At The Deepness Of This Track

3rd Verse Is up

LYrics Are Real Deep Your Best Verse

But I Dont Feel The Kinda Topic On This You Should Keep Your Head Up And Dont Think Like You Are

But Tracks Nice

9/10 Keep Up

^^word i feel u man thanks...

uppin...........

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upppin...........

dope your quality is wayy better , nice emotions man, chorus is dope i like the sampling, nice flow, really deep , thats what i like homie, the beat is cool too, this is one of your best track man, now lets collab on that beat i made that you like:) werdness nice track man, i prefer solo tracks by you or tracks like intermental feat speats you know lol haha dope peace

^lol word..thanks for the feed man.........

Listening... Beats tight. your lyrics kinda sound muffled, but not that bad.. You overall lyrical ability is tight, just have a hard time hearing some of it.. Anyway.. your flow is good sounds on point, presence is nice and delivery as well.. good job, just work on that quality a bit..

drop some feed on my joint in my sig.. word

aight i'm peepin now

Production:Aight the beat is fire..but too many sampled beats going around:7.5/10

Flow:ya flow is kinda choppy but you rode the beat good...its aight:6/10

Pressesne:this is somthing u need too work on you sound like u afriad of the mic man really show how you feel your rappin about pain..man show the pain in ur rap:6/10

Emotion:Again somthin u need too work on this is what gets ur flow down...once you get better at this u'll be a solid audio head....right nwo this is ur major weakenss but work on that and u'll get better like what you right say it like u mean it...:6/10

Overall:Overall this song is just ehhh aight....nothin too hot.....keep it coming tho your coming up like crazy keep it up:6/10

Stay up and stay reall
~1

Thanks for tha feed yall.........

upppin this cmon yall.......

beats pretty hot. Who produced it?

Your emotion in both verses which is more cadence than anything in your particular case, should have come up some, but it gets cockblocked to a large extent by that steaming turd of a mic you spit into. The lyrics are obviously from the heart, just by listening to em. the flow's off in some spots as well. I think you should keep on rhyming, then come back to this track in like 2-3 months when your style solidifies a bit more and re-record it. Because you owe it to your self.

vocals needed to be amped


beat is good...kinda jay-ish


flow is not bad...delivery kinda lacks in this one though...and u normally come nice with delivery


is this what you talked to me about?


lyrics were personal


I liked the track...just needs polish


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you seem to be mumbling alittle bit ...but this is a dope ass beat...im feeling it alot man.....your lyrics arent bad at all andi can feel your emotion through your voice a bit...but i can hardly understand you man in some parts....try to rap more clearly....i dont know maybe its just me but this is a dope drop man...nice job

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