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Old 02-04-05, 12:40 AM   #1
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Jay Kal vs ••••Dice••••

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Old 02-04-05, 12:41 AM   #2
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Jay Kal has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-04-05 12:41 AM.
 
Old 02-04-05, 12:52 AM   #3
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Yo Im rollin Dice, but I don't see 6 sides/
Only 2, and either one only has 4 periods/
I can only think fake like Matchbox rides/
Or fake like failed lyricists/
This is a keystyle, you took the style out of the key already/
You need keys to ignite your verse, but I brought the fire aheady/
You should dip like lays, with your weight in a bag/
Your bag bout to get stolen, like backalley casino riches to rags/
To win this here, you'd need help from up above/
Cause you gettin served like 40 to love/
 
Old 02-04-05, 01:08 AM   #4
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••••Dice•••• has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-04-05 01:08 AM.
 
Old 02-04-05, 01:09 AM   #5
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You poor-slob, I’ma make you eat-these-keys like a MF door-knob,
In need of a new job, looks like termites got to ya rappers log,
Jay Kal seriously dude? WTF you try’n prove?
Now everyone’s eye’n me think’n “Who let the retard in the room?”
Shit’s safe to assume you weren’t ever meant to text!
Not on RV, not on even on key’s, NOT EVEN THE INTERNET!
WTF you expect? To just throw a random battle out and win?
Jay Kal just try’n to be hard, like throw’n juice into tanquary gin.
I’m your flue shot, the vaccine for your so-called “sickness”
So next time ya think bout a call out, remember Dice is your fuk’n weakness



-BLAH, wack as fuk, but i'm tired and i'm going to bed.
 
Old 02-04-05, 01:11 AM   #6
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You poor-slob, I’ma make you eat-these-keys like a MF door-knob,
In need of a new job, looks like termites got to ya rappers log,
Jay Kal seriously dude? WTF you try’n prove?
Now everyone’s eye’n me think’n “Who let the retard in the room?”
Shit’s safe to assume you weren’t ever meant to text!
Not on RV, not on even on key’s, NOT EVEN THE INTERNET!
WTF you expect? To just throw a random battle out and win?
Jay Kal just try’n to be hard, like throw’n juice into tanquary gin.
I’m your flue shot, the vaccine for your so-called “sickness”
So next time ya think bout a call out, remember Dice is your fuk’n weakness



-BLAH, wack as fuk, but i'm tired and i'm going to bed.
 
Old 02-05-05, 06:36 PM   #7
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UP'n this let's get some votes they will be returned
 
Old 02-05-05, 08:37 PM   #8
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ok jay struture is wack streched and just ugly period some shit aint rhyme there is basically no flow at all punches and disses were mega weak as well shit was not good you need to work on those cuz punches and personals win battles and you had none which made you lose 2/10
dice good strture mostly some lines a lil streched work on that use alot of work on punches and personals punches and disses were ok here pretty nice overall but could use some work still they overshadowed ya oppenant easy here cuz his were beyond the weakest of weak your vocab also overshadowed ya oppenant here and flow was decent overall 5/10 a ez win
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Old 02-06-05, 03:46 AM   #9
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UP'n this, thanks for the vote!


Honest Vote for honest vote.
 
Old 02-06-05, 03:54 AM   #10
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You poor-slob, I’ma make you eat-these-keys like a MF door-knob,
In need of a new job, looks like termites got to ya rappers log,
decent opener, punch was okay
Jay Kal seriously dude? WTF you try’n prove?
Now everyone’s eye’n me think’n “Who let the retard in the room?”
weak punch, not really feeling this one
Shit’s safe to assume you weren’t ever meant to text!
Not on RV, not on even on key’s, NOT EVEN THE INTERNET!
pretty good punch here
WTF you expect? To just throw a random battle out and win?
Jay Kal just try’n to be hard, like throw’n juice into tanquary gin.
booo…punch was weak here
I’m your flue shot, the vaccine for your so-called “sickness”
So next time ya think bout a call out, remember Dice is your fuk’n weakness
decent closer

Yo Im rollin Dice, but I don't see 6 sides/
Only 2, and either one only has 4 periods/
weak punch, extend ur flow
I can only think fake like Matchbox rides/
Or fake like failed lyricists/
nope, not feelin it
This is a keystyle, you took the style out of the key already/
You need keys to ignite your verse, but I brought the fire aheady/
didn’t get the last rhyme in the 2nd line…weak
You should dip like lays, with your weight in a bag/
Your bag bout to get stolen, like backalley casino riches to rags/
okay, didn’t get this 1 either, punch was blah
To win this here, you'd need help from up above/
Cause you gettin served like 40 to love/
decent punch

overall Dice took this one…punches were harder and had a
better structure………………………………… …….
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Old 02-06-05, 12:57 PM   #11
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Yea I agree, my battle was pretty soft, but good enought to win..... not saying much...


UP'n!
 
Old 02-07-05, 08:38 AM   #12
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UP'n.............................................. .............
 
Old 02-07-05, 09:05 AM   #13
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bit of a one sided battle here...

dice...

You poor-slob, I’ma make you eat-these-keys like a MF door-knob,
In need of a new job, looks like termites got to ya rappers log,
^^ good use of multies but a weak punch
Jay Kal seriously dude? WTF you try’n prove?
Now everyone’s eye’n me think’n “Who let the retard in the room?”
^^ lol funny punch good job
Shit’s safe to assume you weren’t ever meant to text!
Not on RV, not on even on key’s, NOT EVEN THE INTERNET!
^^ alrryt could'av seen some creativity in tht line
WTF you expect? To just throw a random battle out and win?
Jay Kal just try’n to be hard, like throw’n juice into tanquary gin.
^ decent punch there
I’m your flue shot, the vaccine for your so-called “sickness”
So next time ya think bout a call out, remember Dice is your fuk’n weakness
^^ decent closure and good punch

overall i thought your verse was solid you had some decent punches in there, your flow was good structure was aight your vocab was good and your wordplay was fair... 7/10

jay kal...

Yo Im rollin Dice, but I don't see 6 sides/
Only 2, and either one only has 4 periods/
I can only think fake like Matchbox rides/
Or fake like failed lyricists/
This is a keystyle, you took the style out of the key already/
You need keys to ignite your verse, but I brought the fire aheady/
You should dip like lays, with your weight in a bag/
Your bag bout to get stolen, like backalley casino riches to rags/
To win this here, you'd need help from up above/
Cause you gettin served like 40 to love/


i cant really break this verse down becuz your structure was a tad fucked... i saw rhymes in there but they wernt a,a,b,b they were like a,b,a,b, which made it hard to understand... your flow was decent your punches didnt really connect as much as dices did, your vocab was really that great.. you need to elevate a bit you got potential you just need teaching... i spose your verse was ight but nothin spectacular you lost this becuz of your punches and your structure... 4/10

please return the favour links are in the sig... please explain your votes as they will get d/qued and that is not good...
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Old 02-07-05, 12:51 PM   #14
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Yea after re-reading this battle I dun even know what the fuck that was, I was trying SOMETHING out but I dont even know what. I just want to take the loss and get this off the active battles ha.
 
Old 02-07-05, 11:25 PM   #15
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just check'n verfied votes for the vote shop, ......
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