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Old 06-09-05, 07:11 PM   #1
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KhAoZ ThEoRy vs Ackrite

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Old 06-09-05, 07:41 PM   #2
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Old 06-09-05, 07:50 PM   #3
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Fuck Waitin...Listen....


Khaoz Ya Lifes Meanin...Is Worth Less Than A Prostitutes Cleavage
A Heathen...So God Didnt Bless His Lungs & It 'Cursed His Breathin'!
Fag Your Not Like The Rest...True Shit...Thats Y Ya Punches Is Soft *
Thought You Had Me In Tha Punchline Battle?...Look At The Results!
Answer This Coward...U Got 13 Wins....From Rooks Is Da Question
You ILL?....But I'll Put An 'End 2 Ya Sickness' Like Allergy Medicine!
Nigga Ya Cant Defeat Greats, Go Drink Milk....You Got Weak Bones
No One Cares 4 Ya Raps...Shit, Everyone Prefers Your Cell-Phone!
Khaoz Has Nothin....Will Be Nothin....Damn, Ya Days Sound Dreary
Wait, Aint This Da Same Fagget.......
Who PULLS TRIGS Since Males Refuse 2 Put Dey 'Cock-In-Theory'! **

Aha EZ.....


Those 2 Links Show (1) In Da Punchline Battle He Sounded Hella Cocki But He LOSIN (2) In His Pic Thread, Everyone Complimented His CELL PHONE/CAMERA PHONE...Not Him Lol
(1*) SHIT is SOFT...Since Shit Is True, His Lines All Soft
(2**) When Niggas PULL THEIR TRIGGAS...They Often Call It 'COCKIN' It Back...Put Da Pieces Togetha Lol
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Old 06-10-05, 06:32 AM   #4
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Old 06-10-05, 07:19 AM   #5
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lol, Shitz 2 EZ, Yo, Look.........

Ugly nigga, you lookin lyke Omarion..But Nobody Wanna Touch
Verses Never See'n O'z..
..........& Elevetation iz Slow, Lyke ur foots on da Clucth!
Nose Spread Across Yo' face, knock off jewllery 2. Now why would u do that?
no blockin wen I Throw ''42 Bullets'' On Ya Back Lyke 'Jerry Stack'
Whack herb, win/loss ratio is shameful, Damn Lunatik, Ur Ill?..lol U Liar
Saw yo' open mic'z..1 post ov feed on each & frum ur e-ho Mizz Fyre
Kid, Retire! u can be the first Teen givin it up b4 he hit da Mainstream
Claim Ur Fresh?...Well i guess, its iight bein' a believer ov a DayDream[day dream believer--its and oldie lol]
Reppin C.S Til Death? i hope ya krew made a Funeral Arrangement
Ur Last Spit...
...Didnt hit & ended up ''droppin '' on ur Shoe U Derranged-Cunt!
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Old 06-10-05, 07:30 AM   #6
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Voted For: AckRite

this was an ok battle imma have to break it down real quick coz i gta go for my exam lol so sorry if its rushed.....


khaoz...

you had an alright verse wordplay was there there was some punches but they just needed to be worded better fam... just work on your punches first when u have got your punch then focuz on word play you'll be alot better... your structure is pretty messed up though nopthing that can't be sorted out flow was ok in some parts... u have got alot to work on fam....


ackrite:

ur verses always make me laugh lol u had some humour in there and your concepts are never played... try to focuz your punches for better use and make your set up lines more relevent to the punch intself it was your personals that gave u this win i must say they were pretty funny...

ight this was an ok battle but imma have to give this to ackrite becuz his personals killed it and his punches were worded better.....

khaoz man soon as u work on them thingz i said then u'll be dope as son... good job in this though... you were unlucky...

v/ ackrite...

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Old 06-10-05, 07:38 AM   #7
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lol he had no personals besides dat punchline thing
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Old 06-10-05, 02:13 PM   #8
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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy

KhAoZ ThEoRy - Good spit, your punches were hitten hard, and it flowed well.

Best Line - Kid, Retire! u can be the first Teen givin it up b4 he hit da Mainstream
Claim Ur Fresh?...Well i guess, its iight bein' a believer ov a DayDream

Worst Line - NONE

AckRite - Good spit also, your flow was very well, and you had good wordplay and punches.

Best Line - Nigga Ya Cant Defeat Greats, Go Drink Milk....You Got Weak Bones
No One Cares 4 Ya Raps...Shit, Everyone Prefers Your Cell-Phone!

Worst Line - Khaoz Ya Lifes Meanin...Is Worth Less Than A Prostitutes Cleavage
A Heathen...So God Didnt Bless His Lungs & It 'Cursed His Breathin'!

OVERALL - Close battle, but I gotta give this one to KhAoZ, he had the better punches. Ack your shit was good to, I just felt K came harder.

Vote - KhAoZ ThEoRy
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Old 06-10-05, 02:22 PM   #9
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Sure.....I Had 2 Personals Kid.....Ya Cellphone Shit & That Punchline Battle Shit......Dont Sway Votes

UPPIN'
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Old 06-10-05, 09:11 PM   #10
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Jea Uppin This Once Again You Blind Niggaz..............Vote Up
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Dude Offers Hand Jobs For Votes..Ask 187, He knows It FIRST HAND!

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Old 06-11-05, 06:53 AM   #11
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Sure.....I Had 2 Personals Kid.....Ya Cellphone Shit & That Punchline Battle Shit......Dont Sway Votes

UPPIN'

yo nobody can see diz until they vote so i wasnt swaying 4 votes.
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Old 06-11-05, 09:36 AM   #12
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Khaoz Theory:

Ugly nigga, you lookin lyke Omarion..But Nobody Wanna Touch
Verses Never See'n O'z..
..........& Elevetation iz Slow, Lyke ur foots on da Clucth!
Ok..4/10
Nose Spread Across Yo' face, knock off jewllery 2. Now why would u do that?
no blockin wen I Throw ''42 Bullets'' On Ya Back Lyke 'Jerry Stack'
Decent Word Play..5/10
Whack herb, win/loss ratio is shameful, Damn Lunatik, Ur Ill?..lol U Liar
Saw yo' open mic'z..1 post ov feed on each & frum ur e-ho Mizz Fyre
Ok..4/10
Kid, Retire! u can be the first Teen givin it up b4 he hit da Mainstream
Claim Ur Fresh?...Well i guess, its iight bein' a believer ov a DayDream
Ok..5/10
Reppin C.S Til Death? i hope ya krew made a Funeral Arrangement
Ur Last Spit...
...Didnt hit & ended up ''droppin '' on ur Shoe U Derranged-Cunt!
Blah...3/10

Overall: 21/50

Ackrite:

Khaoz Ya Lifes Meanin...Is Worth Less Than A Prostitutes Cleavage
A Heathen...So God Didnt Bless His Lungs & It 'Cursed His Breathin'!
Decent...5/10
Fag Your Not Like The Rest...True Shit...Thats Y Ya Punches Is Soft *
Thought You Had Me In Tha Punchline Battle?...Look At The Results!
Weak..4/10
Answer This Coward...U Got 13 Wins....From Rooks Is Da Question
You ILL?....But I'll Put An 'End 2 Ya Sickness' Like Allergy Medicine!
Ok..4/10
Nigga Ya Cant Defeat Greats, Go Drink Milk....You Got Weak Bones
No One Cares 4 Ya Raps...Shit, Everyone Prefers Your Cell-Phone!
Wack..2/10
Khaoz Has Nothin....Will Be Nothin....Damn, Ya Days Sound Dreary
Wait, Aint This Da Same Fagget.......
Who PULLS TRIGS Since Males Refuse 2 Put Dey 'Cock-In-Theory'!
Ok..3/10

Overall: 18/50

My Vote - Khaoz..Ackrites Verse Feel Off In The End..Both Need To Elevate With Better Concepts and Metaphors.

RTF With My PicturePerfect Battle or This Will Be Removed.

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Old 06-11-05, 11:35 AM   #13
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Old 06-11-05, 11:38 AM   #14
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Old 06-11-05, 01:43 PM   #15
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