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10-24-05, 09:55 PM | #1 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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Mystic Chaos vs |||DRKMAN|||
IP: FAF1 251D
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10-40 lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 3-0 tko *person wit the most votes after 16 days wins topic: Cloudy Days Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 10-25-05 at 09:55 PM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. DQ'ed for asking for votes in LL: http://community.rapverse.com/showp...postcount=13494 This Battle Is Now Closed
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10-25-05, 01:52 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: A181 D033
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10-25-05, 04:32 PM | #3 | |||
WhoAreYou?
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IP: A181 D033
Cloudy Days
the grey infinity of the the sky gives the sensation of cloudy eyes The gift of the sun's hiding under a foul disguise I sit impatiently waiting for the rays to concentrate And make their way through the thickness and brighten up this date I open my window, quickly disposing of remains of my indo As my mother enters my room i front like i'm playing nintendo and wait.............................................. ......... she leaves my personal domicile and i quietly laugh and smile then i observe a burning leaf descending from my tiles and panic............................. I run down stairs trip, and slip nearly breaking my hip Approaching my front door with a swollen cheek and bruised lips I'm sweating like an athlete but my body temp feels colder I turn the handle i'm nearly gone but i feel a hand arrest my shoulder i turn around............................. I find myself looking into the endlessly hollow eyes Of the grim reaper himself, i become confused and hypnotised In a sudden intense state of unrest and pure dread I look at the stairs i see a trickle of blood on my head While the air outside glows in demonically orange shades And an a contrated feeling of inner pain just invades i run outside..................... i turn back, surrounding Death i see my home engulfed in flames I look to the sky and i find the cloudy sky's unchanged I pray for rain, but it seems that all my pleading is in vain Emotionally strained, i'm feeling mentally drained I pray God ease the pain and let the clouds bless us with rain i wake up.................... i breathe a sigh of relief as i'm thankful for my life I'd rather put up with a cloudy day than fall and die A strange compulsion makes me look out the corner of my eye I see a dark figure standing by my window with a scythe............ ~Souljah~ |
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10-25-05, 05:56 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 8C55 036C
Mystic Chaos has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-25-05 05:56 PM.
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10-25-05, 06:49 PM | #5 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 8C55 036C
know everyone has had cloudy days.....well mine have truthfully been happening now.....check it out Contained with drama subsiding my mind with pain Confused living life, with out mom it wont be the same Dazed in the brain, as I let out my tears from my eyes Praying to our father, hoping to get through these cloudy skys Domesticated family, life at home is getting hectic Dad always drunk, I just can't leave but im skeptic Fights are electric, truly hate my family I dont except it Sophisticatedly handeling problems as an adult Mom passed away, no time for a final consult Now my lifes on holt, regaining strength for life Sobbing my worries away looking to survive Terrible circumstances awaiting at the door Life coming amoung my shoulders to them im a whore They ride my life hard, not liking it but I deal Not saying problems aloud, they are concealed These cloudy days break down my life bit by bit No one feels contrite for me, I anger its explicit Must get with it, these days will only get harder Ashamed of my household?, no just my drunk father He makes these cloudy days tuff, hard to sleep Falling asleep, then wake up...starting over the chain of weep Through out all the pain and agony I still find time to pray I pray to god almight, to help get through these cloudy days *Based On A True Story* I tried to come up with something creative...but with this topic this is all that came to mind
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10-25-05, 09:35 PM | #6 | |||||
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IP: 8C55 036C
upping............................................ ........
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10-26-05, 06:38 AM | #7 | |||
WhoAreYou?
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IP: A181 D033
uppin this ish
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10-26-05, 03:11 PM | #8 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 710A C2C5
upppppppppppppin..................................
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10-26-05, 09:11 PM | #9 | |||||
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IP: B61D DAC6
uppin............................................. .........
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10-27-05, 06:50 AM | #10 | |||
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IP: A181 D033
uppin this ish
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10-27-05, 06:55 AM | #11 | |||||
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IP: 6EED D0AD
*yawns*
gettin ready for school uppin........
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10-27-05, 05:29 PM | #12 | |||||
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IP: B67B C022
uppin this shit for ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm votes
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10-27-05, 05:44 PM | #13 | ||||||
Coming to Kill you All
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This was feedback posted for |||DRKMAN|||
IP: 18C7 DE99
Checking polls mister christianity................
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10-27-05, 07:12 PM | #14 | |||||
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IP: 404F 4F1A
Voted For: |||DRKMAN|||
I gotta give this vote to DRKMAN because his imagery was nice and I felt that i was right there...Also I felt that his vocab was also better...Mystic you were right there behind him but you came up just a lil bit short...I think that it was probaly 1 or 2 lines that gave it to him..But your both nice so keep at it Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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10-28-05, 11:30 PM | #15 | |||||
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IP: 263D 220C
uppin for real votes..............................
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