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atlas the vagabond
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IP:
props to both battlyst, good entertainment. but here's the verdict.
ready-nice structure and flow, i particularly liked these lines.
fuck rewindin ya shit, i'll hit eject and think reflection//
den I replay da tape in slo-mo when i break ya midsection//
facin me? advisors say "no no no" like Jae Mills//
nice way to connect. is ''think reflection'' and ''facin me'' also connected. Because i was wondering why you said, and think reflection. So i thought facin me, was a connection to ''and think reflection'' as well as the line it's already in. if so, that's really hot.
anyway, the problem that we did have here, is that you had some decent punches, but some useless fillers too. The deceive, defeat, beat you one. stuff like that is unneeded in a battle. You can't have open space in a verse(fillers) you gotta keep your crowd's attention.
as for the drop the soap line on purpose, it's not a bitten line, it's just something that's been said over a million times when you are clowning somebody, or something, "Your ass would drop the soap on purpose." yes i have heard people battle me and use that line, it's a common diss. which is unnacceptable in a verse, and certainly not an ender. but i can't call it a bite though. overall, decent verse.
x factor-i liked the fact that you made light of the error of his last line, in both the start and the finish of your verse. Saying what everybody would've thought, earns you a strong plus. but, you had a lot of disses that were A. barely disses B. Not punchlined, or creative. it's like it's not about what you say, it's how you say it. You can't just say, i wear diamonds on my neck, you gotta say, I rock ice that'll bring the north pole to the desert. Everything is about description and whit, and that's how you catch listeners ears.
overall i think that Ready got this one, but keep elevating.
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